All Comments on 'Natalie'

Looking forward to the next chapter and it's a good thing that chose to visit her.

was a good start to your story looking forward to more

you're off to a nice start... please continue...

But it could be great with and editor really great start

cant wait to read more

but a couple of the sentences were incoherent..i.e

"She was already Were brother." ???

liked it...keep it coming.

"Were" as in werewolf mariasmd.

OH SHIT, THIS MEETING COULD BE VERY VERY INTERESTING

A good start. Next time, a longer chapter. Thanks.

I do like your story.

vt

Cant wait to read the rest. HURRY UP!

wit that being said keep up the good work

wow!! I hope the guys dont do anything that will get them killed....but where is the fun in that??? Great chapter! I like how Nat has a hottub and drinks wine!!!! LOL!

I like the beginning... hopefully the next chapter will be longer.

Could you make the next installment a bit longer?

It ought to prove pretty interesting to read how Conall gets past Natalie's work ethic force field....He's got power and position. Let's see him work his mojo on his mate.

Maybe saving her could be a great intro for him...............can't wait!!!!

and I realized I had never read the 1chapter. This is really good an I'm glad I found it. Going to chapter 2 right now!

By the way, congrats on your first submission to Lit!

i just got ask why does almost every story the woman has to be

a virgin or not a virgin but not well know in the sex department

why can't there be for once a well know to lots of sex!!!!!!l

I pretty much have to say this story has me laughing half the time. It is almost as if you have the responses to Conall's over protectiveness taken right off my tongue. I feel like Natalie is a character i could relate too. And that's part of what's loveable about this story. (aside from a hot were and unbelievable sex. lol)

Beginning.

I'm interested in seeing how this unfolds. :)

I'm sorry, but the moment I read 'Your Highness' I couldn't read on. It was hilarious and arrogant. Couldn't help thiking it probably reflects your whole story. But thats just my opinion of course.

Jake

Black women do not have natural long hair down to their waist.

just sayin

Shut up you racist freaks! I think the story is going great.

Black women can have natural hair and it get really long. It just takes care and maintenance. Or, they could have it in locs or braids. Sources: Experience

Unfinished story, no activity for 5 years... but still worth reading. Who knows, the author might come back and finish it up some day.