Sorry about the Wrigley instead of Fenway error, as well as several others. I do really know that the Red Sox play in Fenway, and have seen them and the Cubs play live many times. I do have a good excuse for making the errors I did (although I'm not going to share it -- ha, ha). Please don't let the errors detract from the story since I'm not sophisticated enough to know how to correct them.
A very different kind of menage'a "cinco" (forgive my play on words), and I loved the way it was presented. I, for one, would like to see the story continued. Possibility?
Great story line, I've never read anything like it, three brothers one sister makes for one sore pussy LOL.
Well you title was wrong, it seems she had all the cock she wanted.
Like to see more of the story, and maybe even all four of them before they go home fill every hole and blowing her mind.
Keep writing.
A Better Rotation of Players in Story, Then This Year's Red Sox are Likely to Have !
Every parent wants their children to play nicely together, but not quite this nicely ! I've read a bit about it not being uncommon for baby sisters to fantasize about being taken en masse by older brothers. This was the best fictional exploration, I've read of that scenario.
Potentially dicey and abusive power dynamics were effortlessly averted by skilled author. Baby sis was ridden hard, but not put up wet. TLC was story's marching orders at all times. Nice job by author differentiating the identical triplets as distinct characters.
Very high erotic content % with humor & backstory to burn in mere chapter and a half. Color this story favorited !
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Anonymous05/12/13
Baseball knowledge.
Even though this is a nice story, you are lacking in baseball knowledge. 1) Wrigley Field is the home of the Chicago Cubs. 2) Your road trip isn't plausible. Two American League teams, LA & Seattle. 4 National league teams, SF, LA, Colorado & Arizona. 3) Finally, road trips typically last 7 days and are not allowed by MLB to be over 11 days.
Good writing, but learn more about baseball (go GIANTS)!
English
Fact check
Fenway Park is the home of the Red Sox, not Wrigley Field. Now back to reading!
From the author: Sorry about the errors
Sorry about the Wrigley instead of Fenway error, as well as several others. I do really know that the Red Sox play in Fenway, and have seen them and the Cubs play live many times. I do have a good excuse for making the errors I did (although I'm not going to share it -- ha, ha). Please don't let the errors detract from the story since I'm not sophisticated enough to know how to correct them.
Great story
I liked the very different story line, for me, at least it was different. I would like to read more about their escapades.
RS
Loved it!
A very different kind of menage'a "cinco" (forgive my play on words), and I loved the way it was presented. I, for one, would like to see the story continued. Possibility?
Great story Line
Great story line, I've never read anything like it, three brothers one sister makes for one sore pussy LOL.
Well you title was wrong, it seems she had all the cock she wanted.
Like to see more of the story, and maybe even all four of them before they go home fill every hole and blowing her mind.
Keep writing.
As a huge sox fan my reaction was like "WHAT the Sox play in Fenway" but really the story was so good it didn't really matter. Great job!!!!!
Awesome
GrEat story, but the cubs play a wrigley and play nl teams. The redsoxs are at Fenway and would neve have that road trip. Aside, truly great story.
geography
you do not go through Flagstaff on your way to San Francisco from Seattle. unless you are lost and have an extra week to travel.
A Better Rotation of Players in Story, Then This Year's Red Sox are Likely to Have !
Every parent wants their children to play nicely together, but not quite this nicely ! I've read a bit about it not being uncommon for baby sisters to fantasize about being taken en masse by older brothers. This was the best fictional exploration, I've read of that scenario.
Potentially dicey and abusive power dynamics were effortlessly averted by skilled author. Baby sis was ridden hard, but not put up wet. TLC was story's marching orders at all times. Nice job by author differentiating the identical triplets as distinct characters.
Very high erotic content % with humor & backstory to burn in mere chapter and a half. Color this story favorited !
Baseball knowledge.
Even though this is a nice story, you are lacking in baseball knowledge. 1) Wrigley Field is the home of the Chicago Cubs. 2) Your road trip isn't plausible. Two American League teams, LA & Seattle. 4 National league teams, SF, LA, Colorado & Arizona. 3) Finally, road trips typically last 7 days and are not allowed by MLB to be over 11 days.
Good writing, but learn more about baseball (go GIANTS)!
For those of us who are diehard BoSox fans,
FENWAY is their home.
Baseball History
Wrigley Field has hosted the Chicago Cubs, not the Red Sox for the past 99 years...................??
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