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by Tzara

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tazz317tazz317about 12 years ago
NOT IMPROBABLE

but highly unlikely. TK U MLJ LV NV

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 12 years ago
Damn!

Liked the poem. Accidentally swiped my pinky over the "1" star rating. Disregard!

(Damn iPads are too touchy.)

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 12 years ago
Excellent, Moving and Precise

Most enjoyable too - a great read. Sweet O.

WillowedCabinWillowedCabinabout 12 years ago
I read this in the morning

But came back in the afternoon to say thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
umm

this isn't even close to what u usually write. i was disappointed

PandoraGlittersPandoraGlittersabout 12 years ago
Lovely poem, Tzara

Enjoyed this on the forum, too. Glad to see that others will get a chance to read it.

buttersbuttersabout 12 years ago
sad yet lovely

clear visuals, easily reaches out emotionally. my only issue is with that last line - 'yet will I still write' feels a little awkward to me, like a question but lacking the implied question mark ... not even coming across as a rhetorical question to me. sorry if i'm not getting it, T. it'd read smoother as a declaration (if not intended as a question) as 'yet still I'll write your name in that (extra syllable) sand.'

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