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Joined up writing
Can you please learn to write with joined up sentences in the right order!
From Wikipedia -
Aphrodite is usually said to have been born near Paphos, on the island of Cyprus!
As for the story itself - get yourself a good Proof-reader and an editor!
Poor command of English
A good effort but you should get your work checked by someone with a better command of English before publishing. There is no shame in that. I suspect you are Spanish or Italian form the strange grammar.
I accept all
I accept criticisms towards my work but the anonymous Aphrodite's know-all is rather arrogant
Nice Story.
I don't know where you are from, but your sentence structure is a bit confusing. It is definitely not American anyhow, but it was very entertaining and quaint. I overlooked the wording and gave you a high score because it was a nice story.
Island of Aphrodite
I knew that the Island of Aphrodite was Cyprus. Now you say it's Kythira!
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