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Late with the Rent -- Again! Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by PTBzzzz02/11/12

I think I used to

work with that guy

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by Nitro7065202/11/12

I had expectations

First noticing the title and the brief teaser I expected something a little "mean". This was rather tame. If this was your idea of "the landlord being mean", I'd say you are very innocent in your own right. A few mistakes with words that may have been spelled correctly but clearly weren't the right word. I will look for more but can't say I will continue after that if it doesn't pick up.
3 stars.

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by debbie2free02/11/12

sad not mean

That was kinda lame. When I read the title i thought it was going to be more intense.. I mean really he made her lick the cum out of his hand. And pawed her bit. Thats like a quick bad date. I would have have thought he would have mad her touch him or something lol

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More please!

Excellent story line. Personally I would enjoy him building up to bringing her to orgasm with his tongue after several visits, while he only masturbates. Take your time don't be rushed if some of your audience is impatient. The element I especially like is her conflict between her utter disgust & her pleasure; that you introduce well, with her recognition of juices beginning to flow in spite of her loathing both the man & the situation.

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by Anonymous02/15/12

more...

please, start of a good story

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by Anonymous03/17/12

It's a good start

Please keep "cuming" with more depravities to little Heather. And, please, make her reluctant all the time until the end. I hope to read new chapters very soon.

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by Anonymous10/16/12

good story

this is a very good reluctance story more please

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