I've written realistic stories and "fantasy" stories- all are welcome here. I know this because I've read a HUGE variety of them on this site. The asshole who said to submit this somewhere else should be dutifully ignored. Hell, he/she probably doesn't even have stories of their own to post here, so who are they to criticize? It was fantastical and obviously fiction (by the way, Portuguese IS the dominant language of Brazil... on a technical note you probably SHOULD have fact-checked that, but it's not a deal-breaker), but it was also enjoyable and accomplished what it was designed to do. I hope that you continue writing, publishing and having FUN with what you write. Know this: when you write to satisfy the whims of your audience, you've taken the soul out of your story. Write for yourself!
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Anonymous02/13/12
Loved it!
This was great! I came before I finished - which isn't something I do often!
Summer there is winter here so I think a little more research is in need here as others have pointed out. I did like the story and would like to see more of it. Now we as readers know about the negative anonymous comments that are generated by just a couple of people with bad hangups and no sense of the real world so ignore any comment that is not signed. Keep up the good work and keep sending in stories for us real people to read.
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Anonymous02/13/12
Good job
This is a good story!! I hope this becomes a series, I want to read more about Bella and her dad.
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Anonymous02/14/12
re: Pay no attention to the haters
Right. Most of your comment was slamming others, and THEY'RE the haters? Ya got a fucked up definition of the word.
Really liked it for the sex, but I agree it needed more of a buildup before starting with the sex.
A little backgroung as to why she's living in the States with her mother would have been nice too.
I liked your story. It takes a lot of guts to put your writing out there. So don't let some of the people that put you down to stop you from writing. I have yet to write, but I do read a lot of stories on here. It is believable. Thanks.
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Anonymous02/14/12
Good short story
Young women with well endowed Dad share same desire. Most boyfriends do not measure up. It is difficult to ignore and many women would take opportunity if circumstances are right.
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Anonymous02/21/12
sooooo hotttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!
it was soooo gooood!!! kept me so fuckin hot the whole time!!!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous02/27/12
i felt it was a bit rushed. Maybe more of a build-up of the sexual tension would have been good. FYI when you have someone speak you start a new paragraph when the speaker changes. It will make it easier to follow who is talking. I read second chapter first. Has me wet. Thx
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Anonymous02/28/12
Silly mistakes ruin the story
Brazilian's speak Portuguese, not Spanish. And its Rio de Janeiro, not Rio the Janero. Trailed, not trialed.
Great story, I read it for the heat, passion, and the seduction between a Father and a daughter. The need to have no constant rules of right or wrong; but the need to just give in to the lust of procreating. The forbidden lust of a Father and daughter giving into incest.
All I can say is WOW! MUY CALIENTE!!!! Please write more. My body is on fire and I don't want it to stop.
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Anonymous01/04/13
Terrible
So many little details just ruined this, but the one that just killed it for me was the "near zero percent body fat and decent breasts". 1) That's impossible (uh, what do you think breasts are made of?), 2) that would be so freakishly skinny, it would be scary-looking. Even male body builders have 6-8% body fat DURING competition; healthy women have more body fat than a correspondingly healthy man. Please, think before you write.
"Summer Vacation with Daddy:" - Marco and Bella (Isabella??) - Father and Daughter
Too much detail about the extended relatives and family that have nothing to do with the story line!! Unfortunately, two things: 1) The "summer" consisted of just the afternoon of daughter Bella's arrival in RioJanero, Brazil; and 2) father Marco and daughter Bella fucked deep and consummated three times, bareback, intending to impregnate his daughter!! And, Voila! The story ends before sundown the first day!!
The scenario--Bella being in Rio for the summer, dad and daughter have already bareback fucked three times in Bella's fertile, inviting 18-year old pussy with both of them intending for her to get pregnant, Marco's wife traveling far and wide frequently leaving father and daughter alone for most of the summer, and she's also now entertaining the thought of going to college in Rio--leaves this story perched for many chapters or parts to become a steamy and hot series!
"Summer Vacation With Daddy Ch. 01" - Marco and Isabella ("Bella") - (Father and Daughter)
This is my second reading within the past couple months. The one distinct difference is that I erred in my first reading comments, as Marco and his daughter "Bella" actually fucked four (4) times during the afternoon this particular session took place, immediately after his daughter arrival from Boston, MA.
Readers like myself read fiction for many reasons. Most of us fiction readers like to think of the theme and/or plot as being somewhat realistic and something we can relate to in terms of imagining ourselves in the midst of the story events. The four initial, quick fuckings are not realistic within such a short time, especially because the carnal, incestual coupling and consummation was their first time, ever! The scenes would have been more believeable had there been more foreplay and lapse of time, but the couplings didn't happen that way.
The story does offer some quick hit eroticism, wantonness and no-holds barred sex action, though not well suited to incest consummation, but more akin to stroke, lust and no-love involved animalistic, get their rocks-off passion!! The story however is well written, very quick paced and almost immediately to the bottom line of wham bam, thank you ma'am, no feelings for the partner sex!
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Anonymous08/24/13
Tennis ball sized testicles?
Ever seen a tennis ball? Ever tried holding 2 of them in your hand?
And this dialogue is ridiculous:
"Daddy wants to get all of his baby maker into you."
"Daddy's at your cervix baby. Do you want all eleven, thick inches of daddy cock in you baby?"
What a daughter screwing her father
very few get chance
loved it.
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Anonymous12/05/13
missed
I never got to fuck my stepaughter,and she wanted it so bad,Now she is 40 years old and heavy .when she hugs me and kiss me my cock jumps .some day I will fuck her brains out..
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Anonymous01/08/15
Editing!
Surprised no one has mentioned this yet as it is in the very first line...Rio DE Janeiro not Rio THE Janeiro. Or is this what all the Mexican-speaking Brazilians call it?!
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Anonymous02/18/15
Mistakes
Why does he have a Spanish accent when Brazil speaks Portuguese!?:-)?
English
Editing
Besides a few spelling errors, thus was a very good story.
In Brazil with a Spanish accent?
Besides the poor spelling, the author should know that Portugese is spoken in Brazil.
Pay no attention to the haters
I've written realistic stories and "fantasy" stories- all are welcome here. I know this because I've read a HUGE variety of them on this site. The asshole who said to submit this somewhere else should be dutifully ignored. Hell, he/she probably doesn't even have stories of their own to post here, so who are they to criticize? It was fantastical and obviously fiction (by the way, Portuguese IS the dominant language of Brazil... on a technical note you probably SHOULD have fact-checked that, but it's not a deal-breaker), but it was also enjoyable and accomplished what it was designed to do. I hope that you continue writing, publishing and having FUN with what you write. Know this: when you write to satisfy the whims of your audience, you've taken the soul out of your story. Write for yourself!
Loved it!
This was great! I came before I finished - which isn't something I do often!
I enjoyed this story
Summer there is winter here so I think a little more research is in need here as others have pointed out. I did like the story and would like to see more of it. Now we as readers know about the negative anonymous comments that are generated by just a couple of people with bad hangups and no sense of the real world so ignore any comment that is not signed. Keep up the good work and keep sending in stories for us real people to read.
Good job
This is a good story!! I hope this becomes a series, I want to read more about Bella and her dad.
re: Pay no attention to the haters
Right. Most of your comment was slamming others, and THEY'RE the haters? Ya got a fucked up definition of the word.
:)
I generally like stories with more buildup but the sex was so intense it was amazing :) I wish I had as hot a dad that would fuck me like that ;)
Really liked it
Really liked it for the sex, but I agree it needed more of a buildup before starting with the sex.
A little backgroung as to why she's living in the States with her mother would have been nice too.
good read
I liked your story. It takes a lot of guts to put your writing out there. So don't let some of the people that put you down to stop you from writing. I have yet to write, but I do read a lot of stories on here. It is believable. Thanks.
Good short story
Young women with well endowed Dad share same desire. Most boyfriends do not measure up. It is difficult to ignore and many women would take opportunity if circumstances are right.
sooooo hotttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!
it was soooo gooood!!! kept me so fuckin hot the whole time!!!!!!!!!!!
i felt it was a bit rushed. Maybe more of a build-up of the sexual tension would have been good. FYI when you have someone speak you start a new paragraph when the speaker changes. It will make it easier to follow who is talking. I read second chapter first. Has me wet. Thx
Silly mistakes ruin the story
Brazilian's speak Portuguese, not Spanish. And its Rio de Janeiro, not Rio the Janero. Trailed, not trialed.
stayed hard
jerked off the whole story cumming so hard.
Never the same...
Great story, I read it for the heat, passion, and the seduction between a Father and a daughter. The need to have no constant rules of right or wrong; but the need to just give in to the lust of procreating. The forbidden lust of a Father and daughter giving into incest.
FAAAAAAAVVOORITES!!
I love this story. I always seem to come back to this story and rereading it. AND it gets me wet EVERYTIME!! GREAT JOB!! Cn't wait for more :)
Please Keep this Story Going
All I can say is WOW! MUY CALIENTE!!!! Please write more. My body is on fire and I don't want it to stop.
Terrible
So many little details just ruined this, but the one that just killed it for me was the "near zero percent body fat and decent breasts". 1) That's impossible (uh, what do you think breasts are made of?), 2) that would be so freakishly skinny, it would be scary-looking. Even male body builders have 6-8% body fat DURING competition; healthy women have more body fat than a correspondingly healthy man. Please, think before you write.
"Summer Vacation with Daddy:" - Marco and Bella (Isabella??) - Father and Daughter
Too much detail about the extended relatives and family that have nothing to do with the story line!! Unfortunately, two things: 1) The "summer" consisted of just the afternoon of daughter Bella's arrival in RioJanero, Brazil; and 2) father Marco and daughter Bella fucked deep and consummated three times, bareback, intending to impregnate his daughter!! And, Voila! The story ends before sundown the first day!!
The scenario--Bella being in Rio for the summer, dad and daughter have already bareback fucked three times in Bella's fertile, inviting 18-year old pussy with both of them intending for her to get pregnant, Marco's wife traveling far and wide frequently leaving father and daughter alone for most of the summer, and she's also now entertaining the thought of going to college in Rio--leaves this story perched for many chapters or parts to become a steamy and hot series!
"Summer Vacation With Daddy Ch. 01" - Marco and Isabella ("Bella") - (Father and Daughter)
This is my second reading within the past couple months. The one distinct difference is that I erred in my first reading comments, as Marco and his daughter "Bella" actually fucked four (4) times during the afternoon this particular session took place, immediately after his daughter arrival from Boston, MA.
Readers like myself read fiction for many reasons. Most of us fiction readers like to think of the theme and/or plot as being somewhat realistic and something we can relate to in terms of imagining ourselves in the midst of the story events. The four initial, quick fuckings are not realistic within such a short time, especially because the carnal, incestual coupling and consummation was their first time, ever! The scenes would have been more believeable had there been more foreplay and lapse of time, but the couplings didn't happen that way.
The story does offer some quick hit eroticism, wantonness and no-holds barred sex action, though not well suited to incest consummation, but more akin to stroke, lust and no-love involved animalistic, get their rocks-off passion!! The story however is well written, very quick paced and almost immediately to the bottom line of wham bam, thank you ma'am, no feelings for the partner sex!
Tennis ball sized testicles?
Ever seen a tennis ball? Ever tried holding 2 of them in your hand?
And this dialogue is ridiculous:
"Daddy wants to get all of his baby maker into you."
"Daddy's at your cervix baby. Do you want all eleven, thick inches of daddy cock in you baby?"
pussy of daughter
What a daughter screwing her father
very few get chance
loved it.
missed
I never got to fuck my stepaughter,and she wanted it so bad,Now she is 40 years old and heavy .when she hugs me and kiss me my cock jumps .some day I will fuck her brains out..
Editing!
Surprised no one has mentioned this yet as it is in the very first line...Rio DE Janeiro not Rio THE Janeiro. Or is this what all the Mexican-speaking Brazilians call it?!
Mistakes
Why does he have a Spanish accent when Brazil speaks Portuguese!?:-)?
Wet and satisfied
This story was so fucking hot
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