Loved it, but please less talking between these two when they have sex. It seems like half the story is about Charlie and Miley talking while masturbating each other. How about spending more time on the story and develong the plot.
This story is always so hot, but you keep intoducing more and more plots. How about focusing on the sex more?
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Anonymous02/14/12
i hope brain gets back together with stacy. they love each other
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Anonymous02/15/12
excellent
i hope your next submission comes soon. these stories are the best and hard to wait for.
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Anonymous02/15/12
I love
the story except the talking during sex (sometimes sexy, sometimes really wierd). I really want Stacy and Miley to make up and Brian and Stacy too. Haley I like with Jack but I have a feeling that he's going to throw his happiness away for his daughter and that sucks.
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Anonymous02/15/12
next chapter
i would love if brian could work things out with stacy and with sam. great storyline.
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Anonymous02/15/12
Dialogue
The dialogue during the sex scenes are fundamental in the development of the characters and therefore must be used to enforce the connection between the plot and the characters. Thereof, the story was great and the series looks very promising. Keep up the good work!
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Anonymous02/15/12
awesome
I really liked reading these stories. I do hope that everything works out with Brian and Stacy and Sam. Miley and Charlie them two are crazy, but you got to love them. I also hope the Jack and Haley situation works out in the end. You are a truly given writer.
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Anonymous02/16/12
Wonderful
i have enjoyed this story from the start i think it is wonderful i can wait to see what happens next keep up the good work.
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Anonymous02/17/12
Change the Direction
I have read all these storys, and i dont like the way this story is turning. please dont go this way
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Anonymous02/17/12
Change it.
I have read all of these stories, I liked them until it now. It is becoming quite boring and tedious for me, it seems like it is the same things that keep on happening. Miley is a complete bitch, the world doesn’t revolve around her. Charlie could do such better than her, and if this the direction that the author is going in, I’m afraid that I won’t be reading anymore.
I love this series and nerds hooking up with hot chicks genre , but the direction this is becoming more like a soap opera with more drama, and it starting to require you to put in effort to read . This was a light hearted romance story and it's getting harder to read with the whole pregnancy angle. I just can't help but feel your leading the story down a progressively darker road that will eventually kill this story:(
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Anonymous02/20/12
love it!
I have read all of these stories and absolutely love it! Can't wait to see what happens next!
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Anonymous02/21/12
kudos to you
good chapter dont worry about the haters..if anything I like the direction the story is heading but hey dont listen to me just do what you feel like doing youre doing great keep up the good work
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Anonymous02/22/12
I love this series, but at times it just seems too predictable and the plot keeps on repeating. Miley and Charlie talk to each other during sex, Brain and Stacy keep on hooking up and then breaking up, Brian gets some girl pregnant, Miley's mom is evil, etc. Please, can there be a change in the some of the plot line and can someone be happy for once at least. There's so much drama that it rivals soap operas.
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Anonymous02/24/12
haters gonna hate
keep it up I love your writing and the haters can piss off
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Anonymous02/24/12
I don't think anyone is hating, if you can't handle someone else’ opinion, why don’t you fuck off? It has become boring, like someone said before it was a light-hearted romance but has now quickly become a soap opera drama, too many plots and has now lost its realism. All the pregnancy talk has seriously made it boring, they’re too young, quite immature and the same thing is happening with the other characters.
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Anonymous02/24/12
more please
I've just read my way through the story so far over the last few days. Really enjoyable escapism, and that Miley (such a dirty girl). Keep it up, you've set your mark for what this story is - a sort of sexy soap opera - and I'm quite happy with it as that. What will happen next? Will Victoria crash their wedding? Will Captin Darkness turn out to be the father of Sam's baby? Who will Brian knock up next? And will Miley ever get covered in cum like she desires? Tune in next time! (And theme music).
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Anonymous03/05/12
oh wow
Ok well I loved everything about this story please tell me your on your way to finishing this awesome story I'm like addicted no lie haha well I enjoyed the he'll out of it thanks
It has been a month, we've been patient, How about chapter 27, where you reveal everyon's reaction to Miley being Pregnant? Believe me, everyone is ready for the story!
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Anonymous09/13/12
Ok
This story is getting too far fetched. It's stupid!!! They are too young and don't what what they are getting themselves into and her dad can't pay for everything forever. Fricking freeloaders!!!!!!! I'm done with this story. Do something else. A better story. About people who are older than 20 and have their shit together. 1 star.
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Anonymous02/11/15
way way way too fucking repititious
26 chapters of fucking and fighting
Teeney boppers that dont know their asses from A hole in the ground
most chapters I skimmed past the sex , didnt leave much to read
I rate the whole 26 chapters with an ace, sorry but life doesnt revolve around fucking
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Anonymous10/23/15
I've skipped through the last 10 or so chapters, far too many repetitious sex scenes. This was drawn out far longer than it should have been, for 2 people that, one is supposed to be in college and the other supposed to be working to a deadline for his comic, they do noting but have sex or she interferes with everyone else life.
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Anonymous01/03/16
Repeat ad nauseum
Far, far too much repetition with the sex scenes, far too much 'drama', and the continual bullshit about pregnancy is an enormous turn-off.
Started out as a promising series but went on far too long - should have quit around chapter 9.
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Anonymous06/16/16
"Repeat ad nauseum " an nderstatement
But as to the repeated overly long sex scenes, It's fairly easy to simply "fast forward" to the next part of the story/crisis
another great chapter
cant wait for the next chapter. keep up the good work
Dang Brian
Nice plot twist. Keep them coming!
Loved it, but please less talking between these two when they have sex. It seems like half the story is about Charlie and Miley talking while masturbating each other. How about spending more time on the story and develong the plot.
loved it
Another cracking chapter, well done sir.
hot
This story is always so hot, but you keep intoducing more and more plots. How about focusing on the sex more?
i hope brain gets back together with stacy. they love each other
excellent
i hope your next submission comes soon. these stories are the best and hard to wait for.
I love
the story except the talking during sex (sometimes sexy, sometimes really wierd). I really want Stacy and Miley to make up and Brian and Stacy too. Haley I like with Jack but I have a feeling that he's going to throw his happiness away for his daughter and that sucks.
next chapter
i would love if brian could work things out with stacy and with sam. great storyline.
Dialogue
The dialogue during the sex scenes are fundamental in the development of the characters and therefore must be used to enforce the connection between the plot and the characters. Thereof, the story was great and the series looks very promising. Keep up the good work!
awesome
I really liked reading these stories. I do hope that everything works out with Brian and Stacy and Sam. Miley and Charlie them two are crazy, but you got to love them. I also hope the Jack and Haley situation works out in the end. You are a truly given writer.
Wonderful
i have enjoyed this story from the start i think it is wonderful i can wait to see what happens next keep up the good work.
Change the Direction
I have read all these storys, and i dont like the way this story is turning. please dont go this way
Change it.
I have read all of these stories, I liked them until it now. It is becoming quite boring and tedious for me, it seems like it is the same things that keep on happening. Miley is a complete bitch, the world doesn’t revolve around her. Charlie could do such better than her, and if this the direction that the author is going in, I’m afraid that I won’t be reading anymore.
I love the series , but .....
I love this series and nerds hooking up with hot chicks genre , but the direction this is becoming more like a soap opera with more drama, and it starting to require you to put in effort to read . This was a light hearted romance story and it's getting harder to read with the whole pregnancy angle. I just can't help but feel your leading the story down a progressively darker road that will eventually kill this story:(
love it!
I have read all of these stories and absolutely love it! Can't wait to see what happens next!
kudos to you
good chapter dont worry about the haters..if anything I like the direction the story is heading but hey dont listen to me just do what you feel like doing youre doing great keep up the good work
I love this series, but at times it just seems too predictable and the plot keeps on repeating. Miley and Charlie talk to each other during sex, Brain and Stacy keep on hooking up and then breaking up, Brian gets some girl pregnant, Miley's mom is evil, etc. Please, can there be a change in the some of the plot line and can someone be happy for once at least. There's so much drama that it rivals soap operas.
haters gonna hate
keep it up I love your writing and the haters can piss off
I don't think anyone is hating, if you can't handle someone else’ opinion, why don’t you fuck off? It has become boring, like someone said before it was a light-hearted romance but has now quickly become a soap opera drama, too many plots and has now lost its realism. All the pregnancy talk has seriously made it boring, they’re too young, quite immature and the same thing is happening with the other characters.
more please
I've just read my way through the story so far over the last few days. Really enjoyable escapism, and that Miley (such a dirty girl). Keep it up, you've set your mark for what this story is - a sort of sexy soap opera - and I'm quite happy with it as that. What will happen next? Will Victoria crash their wedding? Will Captin Darkness turn out to be the father of Sam's baby? Who will Brian knock up next? And will Miley ever get covered in cum like she desires? Tune in next time! (And theme music).
oh wow
Ok well I loved everything about this story please tell me your on your way to finishing this awesome story I'm like addicted no lie haha well I enjoyed the he'll out of it thanks
All Right, Where Is It?
It has been a month, we've been patient, How about chapter 27, where you reveal everyon's reaction to Miley being Pregnant? Believe me, everyone is ready for the story!
Ok
This story is getting too far fetched. It's stupid!!! They are too young and don't what what they are getting themselves into and her dad can't pay for everything forever. Fricking freeloaders!!!!!!! I'm done with this story. Do something else. A better story. About people who are older than 20 and have their shit together. 1 star.
way way way too fucking repititious
26 chapters of fucking and fighting
Teeney boppers that dont know their asses from A hole in the ground
most chapters I skimmed past the sex , didnt leave much to read
I rate the whole 26 chapters with an ace, sorry but life doesnt revolve around fucking
I've skipped through the last 10 or so chapters, far too many repetitious sex scenes. This was drawn out far longer than it should have been, for 2 people that, one is supposed to be in college and the other supposed to be working to a deadline for his comic, they do noting but have sex or she interferes with everyone else life.
Repeat ad nauseum
Far, far too much repetition with the sex scenes, far too much 'drama', and the continual bullshit about pregnancy is an enormous turn-off.
Started out as a promising series but went on far too long - should have quit around chapter 9.
"Repeat ad nauseum " an nderstatement
But as to the repeated overly long sex scenes, It's fairly easy to simply "fast forward" to the next part of the story/crisis
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