All Comments on 'I Thought She Made You Up Ch. 02'

A few technical problems with HRt (hard carriage returns) prolly caused during editing but a minor distraction at most.

Based on the beginning of Ch 1, apparently Looney and CeCe don't get together, even though they seem to be pointed in that direction.

I assume it will all work out in the later chapters.

Congrats. Another strong 4. Very hot scene on the porch. No further comments until the end.

The characters are genuine and a the story is flowing along nicely despite flashbacks.

J

When I read this originally, chapter one was there. Now it is not there. I liked it with chapter one. Will chapter one return? Also, I thought that this was a great story. I would like to see this one expanded into a book.

Qhml1 probably had to give exclusive rights to someone who is going to publish the story and wants to use chapter one as a free 'teaser' to promote it.

http://storiesonline.net/s/10499:158146/i-thought-she-made-you-up-romantic-love-story-chapter-1

I found the link and red the first chapter. It was probably banned because it mentioned a 17 years old boy having sex.

I have to say that it is a ridiculous rule to forbid mentioning sex under 18. It would be much more reasonable to forbid DETAILED DESCRIPTION OF SUCH ACTIONS.

In real life there are 13 years old girls giving birth, (sad thing, but a reality) and some stories need to mention such things, and it doesn't have to be erotic at all.

For instance, you may make a story with a grandmother 29 years old, and that includes references that will ban the story.

Rules have to be rewritten.

If the first part isn't available. If it breaches the rules, rewrite or re-edit until it's allowed.

I tracked down Chapter 1 and found that exactly four words need to be changed to meet Literotica's requirement. Obviously, something else is afoot. *shrug* If the author cannot be arsed to ensure all chapters are available here, then the whole thing should be pulled.

This is so funny, keep going please.

Whatever happened to the first chapter ???

FYI: The first chapter can be found on another site, but cannot be posted on Literotica because Looney/ Jimmy is only 17 in that part.

Found chapter 1 (see earlier comments) and enoyed that.

This one is another typical qhml1 chapter and stars to build up the story nicely.

No cheating drama; but it's not in Loving Wives. 5 stars!!!

Happy tale, romantic to a fault, I love it.

5/5

Rereading this. It's great. The bike on the pier story is memorable and all the characters are fantastic. Bravo!

Fun and sweet little intro. Let's see where it goes

4*

BJ

I read this last night. You tell a rollicking good tale! I can't find part 1, though. It's not listed in the stories index, and in the list of other sports at the end of one, the Part 1 link goes not to Part 1 but to the list of your stories. Not your fault, I'm guessing, and wouldn't diminish the 5 I gave part two if it were. But I'd like to get in on the beginning. In the meantime I'm enjoying hell out of it.

Really jumped off a Pier for 140 dollars obviously financial success is not in this idiots future🤣🤣🤣

Well,where is Chapter one?.

Well ,where is Chapter one?

If you Google "I Thought She Made You Up Ch 1 qhml1" it'll take you to the first chapter on a different website

Nice story but she moved too fast to be real. 5 stars anyway.

Bill S.

Thank you to the anonymous poster who supplied the link for the first chapter to this series. It's on another site because of the rules for this one. Well worth a read for the background. Looking forward to seeing how this series pans out. A good start so far. BardnotBard

Who were Bob and Barb.?Where did Looney work,doing what and when had he worked at the grill before?