All Comments on 'Dreams Do Come True'

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MasterAsteroidMasterAsteroidover 8 years ago
Good

This story was good, and so was the action, but you could use a little more detail on the sex. Oh, and if you use quotes it makes it seem much better. And last but not least, make the paragraphs just a little shorter. But overall, good(four stars).

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