by ready2play85
Chapter 3!!!! awesome story so far. Id like to see some apprehension, some conflict but overall very exciting.
good start to a good story, look forward to the next one, had me hard the whole time
Your story had me so hard, that snowballing and when he took her cock into his mouth made me cum so hard!
My god was that story good... The snowballing made me cum right at my desk
Why is it always the amazing stories like this that keep us waiting please add more we are dying to fond out what happens next please finish.
fantastic....character development good....story development great.......do keep it up....:)
Very hot, love the character development. I feel this story has great potential, please keep going.
Please please please will you write more, it's so hot! Really want to enjoy and see how this story pans out :)
Loved it. Hope you'll write more. You have a great talent for it. Really liked that it seems like the beginning of a sexy romance.
I would like to see more written on these two. Good start for a series.
No, really. You Have to write more.
Okay, so, technically, you do not have to do any such thing, right. But this story series is so full of potential.
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Well, after taking a moment, let me just say that you should keep writing (preferably here on Lit). You've got some good story-telling talent. Really, this story-line is hot. The only suggestion I'd make is for you to try out some of the Lit editors to catch all those pesky homonyms and such.
Anyway, thanks for sharing (and please write more!).