Wife Training Ch. 01

A good storyline layout, and start

It could be a real mistake on his part if he tries to make her into too much of a slut.

A very nice story, and I'll be watching for the next chapter.

Thanks for the good read

um ... why?

I dont get the premise at all. They have been married 15 years and they just had some great sex. I dont see what the problem is...

anyone? I mean if for exampl he could not perform or say she had 2nd thoughts and stop in the midsle of foreplay ....THEN I could see the reason why the husband Might consider hypnosis

Good writing and I'm curious to see where you take the wife. How far will she devolved? Will some of the husband's commands be misconstrued or poorly worded? That could be funny!

Great

Great story, keep it going. It had good writing, good grammar, and a great story. Keep it going with more chapters.

love the intro

what's next? really good so far, nice lead in.

What happens the following night?

Great job. I like to see how the hypnosis works between them. What's the husband's plan? Just fucking or throw in some extra spice?...

Where's the sex?

Oh, wait. It's there in that single paragraph that runs on for 503 words without a break. That's just a little too long for a single block of narrative. Try breaking it down some, and don't forget that each bit of a person's dialogue belongs in its own paragraph.

You have a good story started. Keep it going in a believable direction; don't suddenly turn the wife into some slut that all his friends are gang-banging. There are already enough of those.

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Nice start. Lets see what happens next!

I have not finished yet, but the startr is good