Not really sure what the other person is talking about not pathetic or bad.
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Anonymous02/22/12
Hoping for A follow up
Good story. I urge you to think about writing a new chapter, just about that subject, the domination / submission relationship with Laura's father and Claire. Keep on doing your best.Perhaps the psychological part of Laura's thoughts, her mental struggle between what she wants and what is right isn't long enough, but still a very good subject to write on.
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Anonymous02/23/12
Lovely Story
Ignore that earlier comment this was a good plot. Only problem is it was a bit short. Now that the Laura is now completely the good girl gone bad, there isn't any thrill to her anymore. It would be better to make a new set of characters.
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Anonymous02/24/12
Hope it gets better
If there is ever a sequel, I hope the story gets better.
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This was pathetic
worst story ever
Good story
Not really sure what the other person is talking about not pathetic or bad.
Hoping for A follow up
Good story. I urge you to think about writing a new chapter, just about that subject, the domination / submission relationship with Laura's father and Claire. Keep on doing your best.Perhaps the psychological part of Laura's thoughts, her mental struggle between what she wants and what is right isn't long enough, but still a very good subject to write on.
Lovely Story
Ignore that earlier comment this was a good plot. Only problem is it was a bit short. Now that the Laura is now completely the good girl gone bad, there isn't any thrill to her anymore. It would be better to make a new set of characters.
Hope it gets better
If there is ever a sequel, I hope the story gets better.
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