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Very good!
I like how you spin the stories. And though Sirana is not the typical protagonist, you portray her very well and give us the possibility to identify with her through her reasoning and her perception. That is quite a feat for such an a-typical protagonist.
I'd like to read more and thought this one would be longer then 'Sisterhood', but if you want to do it with four each that's fine by me. Just keep it coming. I want to see her humiliate that mage.
egads you leave us hanging
but excellent read :)
Awesome readers
Well, the resounding comment I've received both in public and in private is that this is too short. ^_^ I will take this as a huge compliment, dear readers. You've relieved my worry that I was prattling on too much compared to "Sisterhood."
Some trivia for you: "Sisterhood" was only 16,400 words, about 38 pages in Word. "Subterrane" is 26,000, coming to 60 pages in Word. You guys are some awesome hella-speed-readers!
The third story will not necessarily be the last, and I'll take it into account that some of you seem to want a longer story now that a lot of things have been set up.
I appreciate all your feedback.
Read it all today.
You definitely know how to keep us wanting more! Looking forward to the next arc.
LOVE IT!!
You have truly captured the dark and exotic female perspective of the Drow! I can't WAIT to read more :)
You are a rock star!
Not only does this story feature all of my favorite vices--a sexually aggressive female protagonist, girl/girl sex, anal sex, a mate and slay ritual--you go a step further than lesser authors with the domination scenes. Instead of portraying a typical doormat sub, you give us a true dom who is forced to accept the sub role in order to survive. And accept it she does, taking it in every orifice. Not only that, the formerly submissive Gaelan--no longer confined to the "bottom" rung, assumes the dominant role. That's what separates your stories from the rest of the herd.
Also, I would be remiss if I didn't mention the unique way of bringing a strap-on into the story. Unique, and natural. It wasn't a mere contrivance to satisfy the male urge to participate vicariously in a girl/girl scene. Here, it made complete sense after what had transpired previously. Everything led up to that scene. Brilliant!
Finally, thank you for revealing a little more about the hierarchy and inner workings of the Red Sisterhood. Parceling the information in discrete amounts prolongs the mystery while giving us just enough satisfaction to tide us over until next time. Well played, Etaski, well played.
Another great addition
Well done always good to see another part to an awesome, I really need to read the next series now :)
Take a few seconds to vote please! :)
I love these series about Sirana, fun, amazingly intriguing story, highest quality writing, and the author, Etaski, puts in much effort to update so quickly and complete the stories for us :) . Only 5% of readers vote on average, probably just rushing but if everyone can try to remember to vote at the end of each chapter, it's the least we can do to give some recognition. Cheers!
p.s. personally, I always vote 5 for the enjoyment and quality of writing :)
I love your writing
Bob Salvatore, author of the Driz'zt novels, would, in all likelihood, be proud of you.... and likely a bit jealous. I hope you'll keep these going.
Excellent
It is Excellent.
Star Trek commenter...
Yes, that was me...okay....you are really pushing the limits to allow minds to explore... I'm not such a fan of the "female pleasuring" but I can understand it for this story. This is a female dominated society. Are there ANY dominant males or at least some worthy and strong enough chosen to mate with (physically attractive enough whether they be Drow or not)?
This goes into detail of rituals for the females to aspire to. What about the men? Trying to pace myself, but took off from work and have not move from this spot. I do have to clean "the abyss" (my home) and allow my eyes to adjust from alternating between here and Candy Crush. Yes, I've got issues...lol
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Dominant males?
Mmmm, I'm afraid we don't meet any such as you are looking for until I explore the races of the Surface (around Surfacing Ch 4, 7, 10...). The Drow in this story value magical power, beauty, and intelligence; "worthiness of strength" means you are a brutish working slave who can carry a lot of weight, not that you're a desirable fuck, and any "dominant alpha male" behavior will bring that slave a lot of suffering. It's not valued, it's discouraged.
The males of the Drow species don't even get that big; they are slightly smaller than the female, and the female are better trained in combat by design. The most attractive Drow males in this story (as far as worthy breeders go) are either highly beautiful, very intelligent/cunning, or skilled in arcane magic. Or a mix.
There are plenty of stories with muscular, dominant males, though. You don't have to continue on this one if it doesn't hold your interest. :)
Cheers!
Awesome
I will continue reading this is by far one of the greater reads on this site
You have to publish a book!
I love reading your work, I make sure to rate every chapter 5 stars before moving on to the next because they're THAT good. I think you should publish Sirana's series, I think it would make a great book franchise, maybe even a movie franchise! Your writing is 100 times better than most book franchises which have been turned into movies. I love the level of detail you go into, painting a vivid picture each time.
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