by Tsania
Very erotic without being totally implausible. good job building the tension between them in a relatively short space of time. Good job on the sex and the struggle for power between them. Lot of potential for future chapters.
While brief, this in NO WAY felt rushed or lacking in story content. So erotic, how you manipulated their power play. I liked you having him asking, giving her the freedom to interact or end it, at her choice. Not a fan of the "Non Consent" genre, I'm often irritated when a story turns too forceful for the situation, as is done in many B.D.S.M. stories. They lose sight of it as a "playing" with power. I look forward to reading more of your work, including your take on D/s dynamics.