...really, in spite of those anonymous cowards. As if they have anything to write about either. A few technical goofs, but I still got hard, enjoyed the realism.
THE STORY WAS NICE. BE IT TRUTH OR FICTION. KEEP UP THE WORK. OH DID YOU EVER NOTICE THAT PEOPLE WHO WRITE BAD COMMENTS NEVER LEAVE THERE NAME THEY ALWAYS CHICKEN SHIT LEAVE ANONYMOUS. AGAIN THANKS FOR POSTING.
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Anonymous02/24/12
GOOD START
In your next chapter, mom should have a discussion with him about the cum stained carpet, and let him know she knew he was standing outside her door.And then invite him in to get a close up view.
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Anonymous02/25/12
Your command of the English language is terrible
You really need to work on your language skills. Many spelling errors and sentence structure left much to be desired.€€€€
Anonymous comments should be ignored. These people are just jealous cowards who couldnt string a sentence together if they tried.
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Anonymous02/25/12
Nice short story
Realistic story and actions. Many mom's know about son's behavior and ignore it. It can be better to address it and begin a training program. There are great benefits
English
I hope that this is just a start of the story
I would hope that as time passes, he would get to make love to his mother and enjoy her body, as they both seem in need of a lover.
There could be a great mother and son sexual relationship to be told.
Spelling and grammar...
Could of? It's could have.
more
to short i hate 1 page stories
Needs work
A mediocre story with no real ending, should invest in a dictionary and use spellcheck if you try again
Garbage.........
"My relationship with my mother had always been full of paternal love"????
Ummmm.......Shoudn't that be MATERNAL?
Pretty weak...
... and boring. And why the change from past tense to present?
Not bad...
...really, in spite of those anonymous cowards. As if they have anything to write about either. A few technical goofs, but I still got hard, enjoyed the realism.
GOOD START
THE STORY WAS NICE. BE IT TRUTH OR FICTION. KEEP UP THE WORK. OH DID YOU EVER NOTICE THAT PEOPLE WHO WRITE BAD COMMENTS NEVER LEAVE THERE NAME THEY ALWAYS CHICKEN SHIT LEAVE ANONYMOUS. AGAIN THANKS FOR POSTING.
GOOD START
In your next chapter, mom should have a discussion with him about the cum stained carpet, and let him know she knew he was standing outside her door.And then invite him in to get a close up view.
Your command of the English language is terrible
You really need to work on your language skills. Many spelling errors and sentence structure left much to be desired.€€€€
Keeo Writing
Anonymous comments should be ignored. These people are just jealous cowards who couldnt string a sentence together if they tried.
Nice short story
Realistic story and actions. Many mom's know about son's behavior and ignore it. It can be better to address it and begin a training program. There are great benefits
And In English?
Too painful to read!
Maybe an editor?
I couldn't get past the third paragraph.
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