by BigDaddioDave
Good story.You really need to use better grammar and spell check.
I thought it was erotic, don't let the other comment discourage you. Most people read these for the enjoyment, unless the other comment was made by a grammar teacher, lol.
No, LET the other comment bother you. ANYONE who posts a story without learning the basics deserves any shit that comes their way.
I noticed a spelling error, but I must have missed the grammatical errors as I was rather enjoying the story (which was really rather good).
I'm definitely looking forward to chapter 2
Having a similar step daughter, it got me instantly hard, thinking about her.
Check this out. Most people come to LIT to read stories. Some come to play like they are 6th grade English teachers. Don't sweat the commentors that waste time looking for grammatical, punctuation or spelling errors.
If you misspelled every word, we would still be able to read and enjoy the story. I am here to enjoy the story, as are many others. I found it to be great.
It makes me think of what i would like to do with my stepdaughter.
I like the plot and your writing but due to grammar and spelling I found it unreadable
Like the story but the grammar was atrocious!! Also some spelling errors. Between the two, it made it only worth 3 stars. Work on it and part 2 will be better.