A Keychain of Girls

Great story

I liked it. It bears striking resemblance to the manga 'Mahou Sensei Negima!'. However I feel that it was well done and a worthy story in its own right.
Frankly speaking though, I would have enjoyed a bit more eroticism throughout the story especially after introducing a nymphomaniac character. But that is to the writers discretion and it didn't detract from the story.
Keep up the good work, I'm now looking forward to reading your other works :)

Awesome

Well worked through story and fights! This would have done so well as an anime.

it was very good but

i have 2 issues with it,one the spelling errors,while not numerous were noticeable enough to detract from the overall story. secondly the ending,there really wasnt one,i mean you didnt tie up what happened between danny and the girls,which which one or ones he ended up with,other then those 2 things i say good on ya man,keep writing

Amazing story

Love this story! Glad it wasn't to focuse on the erotic side (though a foursome between the girls and Danny would have been nice) I really wish their was more!!!

yep...I can't seem to find a closure...at least a passing mention of the girls ending up with him would have been great....

nice story

I would have made the odd man out a substitute teacher and give him to the mom but the is me other than that great story I may look to read more