All Comments on 'The Dancing Concubine'

Very good story ,good writing ,but i think it would have been perfect if it was a bit longer ,with more details.

Thanks for the story and I hope you write more.

Enjoyable read. I think inserting a bit of tension - say, having the narrator at first resist her captor for instance, before succombing to her arousal, might have added something to it. Nevertheless a good piece of short erotica.

Hiya, Just wanted to say thank you to Corpse_Rider and Epixryson - is really useful to have your feedback and I've taken it into account with my next piece. Thank you!