by seahaven
This looks like it's going to be good! Please don't keep us waiting too long for Ch 2 :-)
Amazing job for your first submission. Am loving this story and can't wait to read more - great job!!
I'm in love with this already!!! Looking forward to more from you soon :)
Great start to a story. building the characters well. Not gonna rip either character to shreds as true to real life people are flawed and make bad choices. will keep my eye for the next part of this, hopefully won't be too long.
Great start to a story. building the characters well. Not gonna rip either character to shreds as true to real life people are flawed and make bad choices. will keep my eye for the next part of this, hopefully won't be too long.
You go, Kellin! Good for you! Although, I am sure that Kellin and David will make a good couple, David has a lot to make up for. That is, if they even do get together. If they do, then make Kel make David work for it. It's the least he deserves. Lol! A very good start and I can't wait for more. Post again as soon as you can, please. :)
Great job catching the emotions. Look forward to more. It will take a bit to bring me around to liking David again.
So very dramatic, so very high school. It works because it is high school, lol. Keep writing.
TO David: are you serious ? really ? really david ? i mean i know we all make stupid decisions but david COME ON!!..., not cool man ..not cool .
kel is soo sweet and cute , i really hope david comes around , am excited for the next chapter now lol pls make them a lil longer too ..great start .
Conner is evil. David is stupid. Glad Kellin stood up for himself.
I feel you Kei~ *hugs and kisses* Great start! Loving the characters so far and the story line, and no rush keep it going :)
Good on ya mate loved this starting chapter. Kel is an awesome guy and no ofence but Dave is a sore loooooosser!!! C is just a prick. Cant wait to see what happens next. ^_^
Great job on the first chapter. I' m already hooked and can' t wait for the drama that' s coming. I hope Kellan, who knows all too well how David is, smartens up and doesn' t become a doormat for some crush. David, if he realizes what he' s lost, needs to grovel in a way that only angsty 18 year old boys know how to do. Make him work for it! And Conner? He needs a dose of whoring hepagonalitis.
Again great job!
Xoxo Night
Great Start!!
Going to definitely be looking out for new chapters of this.
Can't wait.
Don't keep us waiting!!
:D
More plz I want to hear more from these two Cameron and kellin are great together and should stay together David doesn't deserve kellin after what he did to him David regretted his decision and now he's paying the price he really could've been happy with kellin but he chose wrong and I hope you keep writing more about these characters because I love this story Davids living an illusion if he thinks Conner really loves him he just loves sex and he's playing David for a fool and kellin is finally happy with someone who actually loves him and that's Cameron I hope you write more drama and see if David finally says what he wants to say to kellin and see if Cameron's going to tell him to fuck off and realize what he's lost due to his stupidity and I would love to see if you show David what type of crazy controlled person Conner really is and see if David will always stick with him 2015 is almost over plz hurry great story GREAT STORY