That was a really fun read and it moved at a nice pace. I'm interested to see what the crushers really are and what your heros will do with them! Please write more DW
i can see several ways this could go, all seem interesting, hope to see more soon
has the makings to be a great tale i am looking forward to reading more
i really liked how you wrote this first chapter, it completely pulled me in and kept me. i hope you keep it up because this was very good so far.
Like how this started, and looking forward to reading more :)
Great beginning. Good character study. Look forward to more. Thanks
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Thank you .
I couldn't do anything but become invested in these two characters...I so have to read this whole story tonight. smh. I'm going to be a little sleepy at work, but I'm sure I'll love it. LOL
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