this is an EROTICA site not a PORN site. this was just trashy porn and not well written at that plus it was way to short it should be three times longer. this needs a lot more background and character development and detail plus an end as is it is only a first draft that never should have been posted.
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Anonymous11/12/14
Wow!!
Extremely well written. I cannot express my arousal reading this story. It's rare for me to enjoy a story these days without grammatical errors ruining it. Thankyou for a fantastically written story! Keep it up!
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Anonymous05/07/15
Agreed!!!
I agree with Anon 11/12/14. Well written, very hot, & best of all grammar & spelling were done properly. I look forward to more of your writing, but one request, Longer Stories Please!!!
English
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this is an EROTICA site not a PORN site. this was just trashy porn and not well written at that plus it was way to short it should be three times longer. this needs a lot more background and character development and detail plus an end as is it is only a first draft that never should have been posted.
Wow!!
Extremely well written. I cannot express my arousal reading this story. It's rare for me to enjoy a story these days without grammatical errors ruining it. Thankyou for a fantastically written story! Keep it up!
Agreed!!!
I agree with Anon 11/12/14. Well written, very hot, & best of all grammar & spelling were done properly. I look forward to more of your writing, but one request, Longer Stories Please!!!
Bloody hot
this would be really good with a few more chapters
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