I guess my lack of proper grammar and spelling come in handy at times,, since I just read the story and dont look for or catch mistakes enough to ruin it for me. I could see it all ion my minds eye playing out like a movie and loved it as well as thinking it was hot,
I also wont leave a comment anonymously
English
use a spell checker
Switched point of views
Lost me in 10th paragraph, when you went from first to third person then back again.
hot
I guess my lack of proper grammar and spelling come in handy at times,, since I just read the story and dont look for or catch mistakes enough to ruin it for me. I could see it all ion my minds eye playing out like a movie and loved it as well as thinking it was hot,
I also wont leave a comment anonymously
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