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byAlessia Brio©
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by bassdesire03/10/12

2/3

An excellent 'stand alone' short short, or an episode in anything from a short story to a novel.

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by chilleywilley03/10/12

Sorry couple

Of course it's just a story, but it's a shame the two of them couldn't talk about their problems. The story was tired, lacked passion, or any emotions beyond a tired sadness. No conflict, just...a dead relationship. Wish she had reamed him a new ass hole, and they had a good fight. IMO it would have made this a great story.

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by gravyrug03/10/12

Well written

but very sad.

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by Anonymous003/10/12

A very sad and in some ways lonely story.

You wrote the perfect anti-Valentine story. The woman should have talked to her male companion but in the end would it have made any difference? I hope this story is fiction and bears no relation to the writers 'real' life. A well written sad flash story.

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by estragon03/11/12

Very Good, Very Real

Sad but true, in too many cases. Well-written. Two ultra-minor quibbles follow via "Send Feedback".

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