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movie script

reads more like a movie script than a story also to short. needs more background as to their relationship before this and more detail on the sex and their feelings about it while it happens. read some of the how to articles here and use one of the free editors to help out.

loved it

enjoyed it. well written. good dialogue.

hmm

very nicely written i enjoyed it :)

Movie Script is completely wrong

It's a great story for a short-short. Sure, I love a long story, more than most, but for a quickie, this was a great wham-bam-thank-you-ma'am.

perfect ending

The best ending is that her brother makes her pregnant to seal the love between the two of them

Nice

I'll rate this story higher when it is fleshed out. A good story line, just not enough to go on.
RS

A very good quick short story

Sweet sex with her brother and expecting some more loving the next night.

That's nice and so hot.

Thanks for the read.

Well Written

It's short, but good. Very well written. Better than the others I've read.

Pretty enjoyably! Had me until the 'cum in me then suck it out' bit. Eww! Heh.