I recall those paperback books and you hit the tone very well (I do recall the later ones being quite graphic). Very well written and using imagery that makes the argument that sometimes less is more (something I have trouble with in my own work...lol). I look forward to seeing where you take this!
This story is the first of it's kind I have read on Lit- viewing an incestuous relationship from other people's POV. Gives it a unique flavor. I hope you will be continuing this story and writing others as well. Keep it up.
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Anonymous08/18/12
this is so orginal
I hope u continue this story ive very intrigues to know what happens next
I really enjoy the banal yet bizarre PDAs. The implied parts more then the overt. Yet the arc of rising intensity makes sense. Here the story traded in the tension raised by Allan not accepting his fate for the pregnancy subplot. Ah well still very compelling - I'm a little surprised the author didn't insert just a bit more of a gothic setting.
Still the' in plain sight but small town ' slant worked fine.
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Anonymous10/09/14
Another chapter?
Very well written story. One of the best I have ever red. Maybe Another chapter about this m/s couple who were living together as married?
English
Intriguing and sexy!
I recall those paperback books and you hit the tone very well (I do recall the later ones being quite graphic). Very well written and using imagery that makes the argument that sometimes less is more (something I have trouble with in my own work...lol). I look forward to seeing where you take this!
A Very Different Story
This story is the first of it's kind I have read on Lit- viewing an incestuous relationship from other people's POV. Gives it a unique flavor. I hope you will be continuing this story and writing others as well. Keep it up.
this is so orginal
I hope u continue this story ive very intrigues to know what happens next
More narrators please !
I really enjoy the banal yet bizarre PDAs. The implied parts more then the overt. Yet the arc of rising intensity makes sense. Here the story traded in the tension raised by Allan not accepting his fate for the pregnancy subplot. Ah well still very compelling - I'm a little surprised the author didn't insert just a bit more of a gothic setting.
Still the' in plain sight but small town ' slant worked fine.
Another chapter?
Very well written story. One of the best I have ever red. Maybe Another chapter about this m/s couple who were living together as married?
WAY BEYOND WEIRD
Absolutely NOTHING erotic about this story. This one meets extreme mental illness category at best.
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