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Keeping The Blondes Down Ch. 01

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by Anonymous03/21/12

Great story! Hope you make a chapter 2!!!

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by carlieplum03/22/12

good start

Maybe get an editor because the errors detract from what is an interesting story. For example, you call it an intra-venous mind control device, but that would mean it is stuck in a vein, not swallowed. Lots of little typos too.

But, like I said, cool idea and I hope you keep going with it!

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by C_frommn03/23/12

Great Start

will be interesting to see how each Woman reacts after the fact esp. Andy since women will be hitting on her. and Reminding her of their Time Together.

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by Anonymous04/29/13

Good story but it is spelled withdrawing btw

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