As always nice job on creating good character's and a storyline that pulls you in, hope there will be more in the near future. Thanks for your time and effort.
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Anonymous03/22/12
a little wordy but it was pretty good
try to be more direct but out of all that I read of these this was one of the best.
this is a great story...you could some random side trips and extra characters to make it grow long...but make it keep coming..the plot so far has been pretty good...so i hope for more soon :)
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Anonymous05/24/12
Wonderful series
I love you
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Anonymous05/28/12
You are a brilliant writer
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Anonymous08/08/12
Please write more!!!!
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Anonymous08/10/12
YOU ARE THE BEST!!!
plzzz plzzz plzzz write more on this series.. plzzz!
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Anonymous08/19/12
Great story, one of the best!
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Anonymous08/31/12
One of the best "saves" I have ever read
The payoff at the end of chapter 3 was just perfect. Prior to that scene, I was thinking "Now how the Hell are they going to get out of THAT?" I can't wait to see where you take this story, next. Please update soon. =)
I have read all of your stories and I love every single one of them! Your stories are master pieces! Keep writing because I love you!
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Anonymous09/16/12
need more
Can't wait for the next chapter keep golng.
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Anonymous10/22/12
totally awesome
This is a really good story, I personally would like to read more whenever the author decides to write more..I have a friend that also fell in love with her brother..They lived through the ridicule from shallow people..To this day they are happy, with family and grandchildren...It is not impossible, but the couple has to be strong and know what they want.
I love this story filled with drama, tension,romance and hot sex, one of the best on this site. It could definitely be placed as one story in the romance section. I must say i'm a little disappointed this is the last in the series. Although it clearly isn't unfinished like a lot of stories on this site I feel there is a little more of the story to tell.
I was looking forward to the tension involved with the parents,friends and ex's when the truth comes out, which I assume would happen soon if they were to report Warren to the police. The struggle to remain together would have been nice to read and would be satisfying to see them get through it.
I understand it must be hard to write an ending to this type of story as it would inevitably involve a lot of conflict. Maybe an epilogue would suffice ?
Still like I said it doesn't end abruptly. Thanks for the hard work. Possibly your best although Savannah is also very good.
5 Stars !
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Anonymous02/11/13
simply amazing!
This story is simply amazing and wonderful, i just loved every second reading it. i loved the characters and I would love another chapter of this series, i know the author doesn't want to keep writing it, but still the hope is the last thing im going to loose.
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Anonymous02/20/13
Well considering how madison feels about nathan, he's definitely screwed. So looks like he has a choice bite the bullet and tell their parents what's going on or move to another state at least until she gets over him.
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Anonymous06/06/13
Thanks-I'm loosing sleep!
Its 0424 hrs but I had to read every word of this trilogy. You sure can write!
Thanks again for sharing.
Bluejacket01 OUT
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Anonymous07/27/13
So aren't we going to see more of this? I want to know what happens now. And I want to see Maddy rubbing at Millie's face that she lost Nathan.
But most of all I wanna see them together for good.
Enjoyed every word...waiting for more...hope this was not the end!!!!!
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Anonymous12/23/13
Excellent writing
Your characterizations are excellent and the plot is well-developed and plausible (well, maybe except for how naive the parents are!) The story held my interest from start to finish--or should I say, to the climax! This is one of the most literate stories I've found on this site, and I'm so grateful for the quality of your writing. I look forward to seeing more of your work
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Anonymous01/12/14
Please make chapter 4
This is one of the best literoticas I've ever read. I really wish you'd make a ch.4
this is sooooooooooo life like . parts made me laugh , some broth tears to my eyes . this is a kind of love that is heart and soul to no end, the strongest you will ever find on this earth
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Anonymous11/22/14
The meaning of prone
In this chapter you wrote, "Madison stood prone under the water ..."
This is oxymoronic. Prone means to lie flat, usually on the belly. As far as I know it is impossible to stand flat on your belly.
Other than that, it a good story. I hope you are going to finish it.
.. but something tells me that after 2 years since this chapter, we're not going to get a chapter 4, are we? Which is very disappointing.
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Anonymous10/25/15
what an hack this writer is
go to this idiots bio page and read his comments on his stories, he is such an idiot if he thinks this story is finished. everyone needs to pan all his stories or boycott them until he finishes this story properly. this series would have been better unposted instead of unfinished.
English
Tee hee hee
I love how these parents are so comically ignorant about what is going on under their noses!
I hope there is more???
Please....
Please keep this going....I like that suspenseful anticipation of what could possibly happen.
i love it...
dont stop writing about Maddy and Nathan!!
Keep going!
Please! Your writing is great!
Great Story!
As always nice job on creating good character's and a storyline that pulls you in, hope there will be more in the near future. Thanks for your time and effort.
a little wordy but it was pretty good
try to be more direct but out of all that I read of these this was one of the best.
Incredible!!!
Just Waiting Impaciently for the next chapter!!! very nice work!!!
Great as usual
Love your stories! Thanks for writing them!
More, please....
This story has been very enjoyable. Please keep it up.
cant wait for next chapter! your work is always so awesome:)
great story
great story! can't wait for the next chapter.
worth the wait
This chapter was worth the wait. Look forward to the next installment.
another great series
another great series. but how will it end is the question. once again you got me looking forward to another great story. great work.
Please continue this series...
All three of your series are great - please continue.
great!!! i hope for more
this is a great story...you could some random side trips and extra characters to make it grow long...but make it keep coming..the plot so far has been pretty good...so i hope for more soon :)
Wonderful series
I love you
You are a brilliant writer
Please write more!!!!
YOU ARE THE BEST!!!
plzzz plzzz plzzz write more on this series.. plzzz!
Great story, one of the best!
One of the best "saves" I have ever read
The payoff at the end of chapter 3 was just perfect. Prior to that scene, I was thinking "Now how the Hell are they going to get out of THAT?" I can't wait to see where you take this story, next. Please update soon. =)
Wow
I have read all of your stories and I love every single one of them! Your stories are master pieces! Keep writing because I love you!
need more
Can't wait for the next chapter keep golng.
totally awesome
This is a really good story, I personally would like to read more whenever the author decides to write more..I have a friend that also fell in love with her brother..They lived through the ridicule from shallow people..To this day they are happy, with family and grandchildren...It is not impossible, but the couple has to be strong and know what they want.
Great story, would love more.
I love this story filled with drama, tension,romance and hot sex, one of the best on this site. It could definitely be placed as one story in the romance section. I must say i'm a little disappointed this is the last in the series. Although it clearly isn't unfinished like a lot of stories on this site I feel there is a little more of the story to tell.
I was looking forward to the tension involved with the parents,friends and ex's when the truth comes out, which I assume would happen soon if they were to report Warren to the police. The struggle to remain together would have been nice to read and would be satisfying to see them get through it.
I understand it must be hard to write an ending to this type of story as it would inevitably involve a lot of conflict. Maybe an epilogue would suffice ?
Still like I said it doesn't end abruptly. Thanks for the hard work. Possibly your best although Savannah is also very good.
5 Stars !
simply amazing!
This story is simply amazing and wonderful, i just loved every second reading it. i loved the characters and I would love another chapter of this series, i know the author doesn't want to keep writing it, but still the hope is the last thing im going to loose.
Well considering how madison feels about nathan, he's definitely screwed. So looks like he has a choice bite the bullet and tell their parents what's going on or move to another state at least until she gets over him.
Thanks-I'm loosing sleep!
Its 0424 hrs but I had to read every word of this trilogy. You sure can write!
Thanks again for sharing.
Bluejacket01 OUT
So aren't we going to see more of this? I want to know what happens now. And I want to see Maddy rubbing at Millie's face that she lost Nathan.
But most of all I wanna see them together for good.
Enjoyed every word......
Enjoyed every word...waiting for more...hope this was not the end!!!!!
Excellent writing
Your characterizations are excellent and the plot is well-developed and plausible (well, maybe except for how naive the parents are!) The story held my interest from start to finish--or should I say, to the climax! This is one of the most literate stories I've found on this site, and I'm so grateful for the quality of your writing. I look forward to seeing more of your work
Please make chapter 4
This is one of the best literoticas I've ever read. I really wish you'd make a ch.4
very very good
this is sooooooooooo life like . parts made me laugh , some broth tears to my eyes . this is a kind of love that is heart and soul to no end, the strongest you will ever find on this earth
The meaning of prone
In this chapter you wrote, "Madison stood prone under the water ..."
This is oxymoronic. Prone means to lie flat, usually on the belly. As far as I know it is impossible to stand flat on your belly.
Other than that, it a good story. I hope you are going to finish it.
A good story...
.. but something tells me that after 2 years since this chapter, we're not going to get a chapter 4, are we? Which is very disappointing.
what an hack this writer is
go to this idiots bio page and read his comments on his stories, he is such an idiot if he thinks this story is finished. everyone needs to pan all his stories or boycott them until he finishes this story properly. this series would have been better unposted instead of unfinished.
Another Chapter or two
Definitely need to have another chapter or two for this story. Inquiring minds need to know what happens to our two lovebirds.
Definitely needs a few more chapters...
Please?
J
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