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nice

it's a nice start. keep up the good work.

One point of view.

Pick one point of view and stick with it. Jumping back and forth gets confusing and makes this long.

YES!

This is a really good start. If you wanna do two perspectives, I suggest hitting enter twice and putting the names over the paragraph when you switch. I wanna see how this ends ;)

The phrase is "worthwhile" or "worth my while" and two different perspectives should definitely be in different paragraphs.

Thank yall

Thanks for yalls help!! I'll pay more attention to my phrases and my point of view layout =)) this is my first and I hope I can make it better