by LeaRN57
Great descriptions, really got hot reading it, please slow down a bit. I firmly believe the mind is the best erogenous zone. The anticipation gets you hotter. Your story was very good, but (I believe) would have been better for extending it. More nuances and "foreplay". Still, all-in-all a very good story. Keep writing, please.
I love your directness and think you do a great job of drawing a great picture with your words. I find myself wanting to be the next one you jump onto. Thank you for sharing!