Too Clever by a Mile

Intresting story

Too much telling not showing in the beginning. But it got much better as it went on.

QUESTIONS, PROMISE NOTES AND INDECESCION

sounds like a relationship for a Gamblers Train. TK U MLJ LV NV

How many chapters?

A chapter a week? But how many chapters does the story contain?

Good story. I'm not sure you need that opening prologue or forward however. Most of what you say in that you say very soon afterward in the main text.

Interesting Story

It reads like the first chapter of a comfortable novel. There are lots of potential detours here. Thanks.

Odd sort of predator...

...with no apparent skills in the chase and the kill. If the desire to hurt was all in all, shrews would rule the forest.

WHAT TO SAY TO A NAKED LADY

or what to do with one, TK U MLJ LV NV