Oh my goodness, I'd say you certainly succeeded! There are some spots where the grammar seems off or there's a word missing, but even so this would have taken me an hour, at least! I adore this, so much actually that I may, ahem, use some of the ideas in this when my fiance gets home. Hehe! GREAT job! I'd love to read more!
I followed your link here from the OSP thread. Judging by this story, the woman who finds your services will be very lucky. :)
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Anonymous03/08/13
What a bitch
What she earned was to be thrown out the door, lock, stock and barrel. Never to return. Who needs the abuse? No one.
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Anonymous03/08/13
Points for a 20 minute story, but I didn't find it arousing. I am female. I don't see how taking charge of your pleasure equals being ugly to others-and that goes for both fdom and mdom. Domination does not equal ugly behavior either. My preference....
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Anonymous07/29/13
I thought it was great and detailed and I was very aroused by it:)
as a sometimes writer myself, I know how wonderful getting feed back is! So I hope this may inspire you further ;)
Facesitting is a HUGE turn on for me, and while there is a lot of it out there, your story has a convergence of several other kinks that make it really stand out! To begin with you write in Third Party POV. As a Dom myself, I love to read from ANY Perspective OTHER than the subs. I hate reading a story with some sub talking about a women sitting on "My face" very much a turn off.
Also, you include SMELL In this! Once again something missing, as though the strong natural oder of a Women is something to be ashamed of or cover up. It really is wonderful to read of a sub male taking his time inhaling the powerful scent of a women.
Third are Juice! Many women have very powerful "Femgasms" And ejaculate just as much as a man! It is very refreshing reading about a women that doesn't just get "wet" but is actively squirting enough fluids to soak the male she is riding.
All in all LOVELY Sotry ad hope to read more!!!
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Anonymous04/18/14
Epic
This is my first time reading bdsm stories where the guy get tied up and I'm shocked that I am as hard as I am when it's the woman getting humiliated
English
Ohh I like thios story very much. One of the best here. I cant wait to see how she continues to use and abuse him. Perhaps some punishment even?
great!
Awsome story so far , This is my absolute fantasy just to get used for her pleasure . keep it up!
Twenty minutes?!
Oh my goodness, I'd say you certainly succeeded! There are some spots where the grammar seems off or there's a word missing, but even so this would have taken me an hour, at least! I adore this, so much actually that I may, ahem, use some of the ideas in this when my fiance gets home. Hehe! GREAT job! I'd love to read more!
I think I need some water...
I followed your link here from the OSP thread. Judging by this story, the woman who finds your services will be very lucky. :)
What a bitch
What she earned was to be thrown out the door, lock, stock and barrel. Never to return. Who needs the abuse? No one.
Points for a 20 minute story, but I didn't find it arousing. I am female. I don't see how taking charge of your pleasure equals being ugly to others-and that goes for both fdom and mdom. Domination does not equal ugly behavior either. My preference....
I thought it was great and detailed and I was very aroused by it:)
LOVE IT!!!
as a sometimes writer myself, I know how wonderful getting feed back is! So I hope this may inspire you further ;)
Facesitting is a HUGE turn on for me, and while there is a lot of it out there, your story has a convergence of several other kinks that make it really stand out! To begin with you write in Third Party POV. As a Dom myself, I love to read from ANY Perspective OTHER than the subs. I hate reading a story with some sub talking about a women sitting on "My face" very much a turn off.
Also, you include SMELL In this! Once again something missing, as though the strong natural oder of a Women is something to be ashamed of or cover up. It really is wonderful to read of a sub male taking his time inhaling the powerful scent of a women.
Third are Juice! Many women have very powerful "Femgasms" And ejaculate just as much as a man! It is very refreshing reading about a women that doesn't just get "wet" but is actively squirting enough fluids to soak the male she is riding.
All in all LOVELY Sotry ad hope to read more!!!
Epic
This is my first time reading bdsm stories where the guy get tied up and I'm shocked that I am as hard as I am when it's the woman getting humiliated
Then he did what anyone would do
He bit her clit off. End of stupid story.
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