One Time at Band Camp...

More, please...

Nice little story and, best of all, written properly and a pleasure to read without wincing at improper usage, spelling errors, etc.

Thank you.

5 Stars

Well, it's a winner for me. Thank you.

Well written

technically but lacked character development and dialog enough to see where the attraction might be that leads to romance.

long desired, finally realized crushes

are a favorite fantasy of mine. the conflict here was understated, but in a pleasantly realistic way. so many circumstances could have prevented it (jackson getting a real job, good weather, no barn) that their night together was something of a "perfect storm", a pun you may have intended?

Another fine story

from this talented young writer
A good story line and an excellent command of dialog.
5 Stars all the way and a fitting contender for the Earth Day Contest prize.

Great but could have had more detail.

This was a very sexy story but it could have had more detail such as tan lines, thrust, cumshots, bouncing of tits, wetness... All and all it was a good and sexy story, keep up the good work.