by Victoura56
Was this your first time? The story rushed through. There was no real background to the main character, the alien was almost indescribable, and the sex scene was a little quick and somewhat non decriptive.
I feel if you took a little more time with the middle and end it could be a better story.
I hope i could provide a little constructive insight
Not too bad for a first time, but definitely needs more development. If he is giving her a choice in accepting him then he should give her more info to make the choice.
This was a good story with a little work it would be a great story. I would love to read what happens next
I've read things like this on this sight alot. Try to redo this with a bit more originalality.
This almost feels like it could have been multiple chapters crammed into one. Not bad though