All Comments on 'Blackmailing the Queen Bitch'

The potential is here but theres a bit that needs to be done

But it needs fleshing out,like why wouldn't he be able to have sex? Also he wouldn't have just one copy of the evidence,so taking the stuff from the limo wouldn' t do her any good...be interesting to go on with this,what being her slave would be like.

There are way too many holes in the story development for it to gell as a completed project. Take what you have & develop it properly. E.g. the 5th paragraph holds the kernel of the discovery of blackmail material; [1] how did he discover it?; [2] who helped him?; [3] one example of why it would be worthy blackmail material, etc. From "sexual ecstasy" to "Suddenly something was wrong..." Wow! Too much, too soon, no explanation.