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Um... we're going too just settle for "Wow" for now.
That. Was. Hot.
Maybe I have just a *bit* of a sadistic tendency... ;)
Masochistic tattooees ?
I had the opportunity to tattoo my ex wife. Much against her wishes ! Yet she let me do it and clearly was getting very excited. She had several climaxes while I worked.
That surprised me the most, was she masochistic ? Or was it the idea of being marked permanently ? Certainly not the pain ! Maybe some day I will attempt to write the story, but I lack your talent !
You wrote a good story, never mind the gramatical errors ! It is the story that counts !
Someone wrote "useless information as filler" That person has never been inked apparently
I am a tattoo artist and now in my late 30s I can still remember my first ever orgasm was when my buddy Andy for my sweet 16 bday, was doing a rose on my inner ankle and hit that bone OMG there is a nerve that connects from that area right up to the vagina (in reflexology and acupuncture it is used to treat the female reproductive organs) I jumped up after I was done twitching and ran into the bathroom crying thinking I had pissed myself in front of all these hot guys that hung out with my big brother. The shop owners daughter April was working the register and came to check on me, I told her what happened and she ran next door to get me some new pants to put on and get her mom. We were both young so dont laugh, at that age we didn't know what squirting was. Well after her mom had a little talk with me I was able to go finish it and then decided I wanted another one asap. I guess from a psychological perspective my mind will always associate the oxytocin rush of an orgasm with the buzz of the armature bar vibrating off the coils, the smell of a sterile clean workspace mixed with the rubber scent of the gloves and cellophane and the first few zaps of electricity while the amp is adjusted and you know in seconds that ripping burn is going to set your flesh screaming with every nerve ending awakened and someone else is completly in control of your pleasure or pain. Point is ....I got my rocks off to this story because of the details and those perfect details drew me into the story like nothing I have ever read before. BTW...the rocky horror picture show reference!!! Srsly! I think I love you lol. Kk going to read pt two now xoxo
CHECK THIS OUT!!!!
Anonymous 5/13/15 commented "You wrote a good story . . . It is the story that counts !" I agree wholeheartedly, this story is well written. When he/she further opines ". . .never mind the gramatical errors" I have to offer a different point of view. while your skill as a writer is very evident, you failed to display the technical expertise to polish up this diamond-in the-rough. If you feel as this commenter does, by all means, do NOT take the time to raise the overall quality of your work to a higher level. If, however you are concerned with improving the overall qaulity of your work, I recommend a literate editor to clean up an otherwise first-rate job of writing. For your considersation, here is a list of potential areas for improvement:
State (state)
Tattoo (2)
walked threw (11)
sense when (2)
When ever
cell mate
drive threw (drive-through)
half open (half-open)
out (of) the bathroom
was no prison sounds (were)
bare second (seconds)
Lost (lost)
each others (other’s)
Celtic know (knot)
seamed (seemed)
your done (you’re)
She (she)
few weeks latter (later)
it maybe a month (may be)
what ever (whatever)
line of scaring (scarring)
ask Sara (asked)
had too explain (to)
whipped away any lose hairs (wiped) (2) (loose)
pealed away (peeled) (2)
I looked (It)
Okay-be. Well come over her and lay down (here) (lie) (STRANGE WORDING!!!!)
slight rise bellow (below)
hyper ventilate (hyperventilate)
taunt (tauten)
taunt (taut) (2)
left over (leftover)
picked back up my machine (picked my machine back up) (VERY AWKWARDLY EXPRESSED!!!!)
sink the skin too deep (depress)
god (God) (4)
every thing (everything)
it's own (its)
Understand that this is not necessarily an exhaustive list!!!.
Good story
Enjoyed this despite the grammar errors. Though I do have to say the use of threw instead of through really did get annoying (ok some may say I'm being picky but i feel that good writing can help make a story a great read rather than just a good one). Please do keep writing as I've really enjoyed most of your work so far...
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