I like the subtle uncertainty in Danielle's and Karen's reaction to their plot and the fact that they discuss what they are going to do during the sex. This gives the scene an authentic feel. You could add depth to your characters by showing more of their emotions. Nicely done and please keep writing.
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I like the subtle uncertainty in Danielle's and Karen's reaction to their plot and the fact that they discuss what they are going to do during the sex. This gives the scene an authentic feel. You could add depth to your characters by showing more of their emotions. Nicely done and please keep writing.
Very nice!
Well written and quite enjoyable. Thanks!
Really?
Your fantasy story includes condoms and pot roast?
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