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Taken By Fire: Ignited Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/20/12

Drop Dead good

So hot im in love move please

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by Anonymous04/25/12

Love it!

More please!!!

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by Anonymous06/08/12

romatic

it remind me off my life with a special person

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by WildFireCowgirl03/19/13

Bad Grammar

I really could not understand this piece. At all.
After the first few sentences I realized you didn't make a distinction between characters. You switch from "she looks at me" to "Amber looks at Lilly" to "Amber looked at Lilly" and it confused me.
I couldn't finish.

With the help of an editor, this might be better.

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