Probably the best chapter in most stories I've read in a very long time. Cathy's turn around seems a little too fast, but it's welcome. I'm seriously enjoying this story and can't wait for more.
i like the story as it is progressing, but i'm not really crazy about the bondage aspects. the religion part is ok, as long as you don't get into the tv types. they're bigger con men than she is or was, as the case may be. keep up the story, i'm curious to see where it goes....thanks.
To any reader upset by the presence of God in this story. This is a story in which the central theme has to do with a hospice for children; a place where children go to die. If all you want is a fuck story there are thousands of them on this web site. I know I'm no Hemingway. This story is chock full of all kinds of odd behavior, but I don't think bringing up questions about God in a story where children die with regularity is unreasonable. I'm not advocating any particular religious preference. I'm a Christian, and I have a suspicion nearly all readers on this site, if they aren't atheists, are also probably Christians or Jews. But even if the chief advocate of your belief system is Muhammad, Buddha, Lao Tze, Confucius, Ahura Mazda, or Lugus I'm OK with that. Carvohi
Both are being rocked by the life they are living together. Basically one does wonder about what sort of people can stand to participate actively in a hospice. In fact,thinking about it dedicated people always get going over from life.
English
Ok, nice.
Probably the best chapter in most stories I've read in a very long time. Cathy's turn around seems a little too fast, but it's welcome. I'm seriously enjoying this story and can't wait for more.
Yes this is why I seek your writing out
Much better then your last cross hairs, you seem to be on your game!
Religion
There was too much discussion of religion in the story. I don't mind it in passing but you made it go to deep.
I am outa here
story line
i like the story as it is progressing, but i'm not really crazy about the bondage aspects. the religion part is ok, as long as you don't get into the tv types. they're bigger con men than she is or was, as the case may be. keep up the story, i'm curious to see where it goes....thanks.
About God from the author
To any reader upset by the presence of God in this story. This is a story in which the central theme has to do with a hospice for children; a place where children go to die. If all you want is a fuck story there are thousands of them on this web site. I know I'm no Hemingway. This story is chock full of all kinds of odd behavior, but I don't think bringing up questions about God in a story where children die with regularity is unreasonable. I'm not advocating any particular religious preference. I'm a Christian, and I have a suspicion nearly all readers on this site, if they aren't atheists, are also probably Christians or Jews. But even if the chief advocate of your belief system is Muhammad, Buddha, Lao Tze, Confucius, Ahura Mazda, or Lugus I'm OK with that. Carvohi
Excellent Chapter
Both are being rocked by the life they are living together. Basically one does wonder about what sort of people can stand to participate actively in a hospice. In fact,thinking about it dedicated people always get going over from life.
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