"I know, Darling." Her lips touched my ear as she whispered into it. "You're a young man and young men wake up with erections, don't they? Young men just wake up hard, it's a fact of life."
And after that she starts giving him a handjob and tells him to relax- fantastic. Great premise and great story. Thanks!
This is a prose poem with a mysterious beginning -- the war, the lost mother, the authorities, and the ever present rain. Every sentence is carefully crafted, every word just right.
You are an elegant writer and an accomplished story teller.
English
great start
more please excellent start so many ways to go
Totally want more
That was great!!!!! totally wanna see where his aunt takes him in this story
Outrstanding
Outstanding story from a skilled writer who knows how to do it. All elements are perfect. We need more, please. And thanks.
Manhood
Great storyline! Well written. More please. This young man can learn a lot from his aunt.
Great start!
An intriguing beginning with lots of promise. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this!
An erotic loving story
This is my favorite part:
"I know, Darling." Her lips touched my ear as she whispered into it. "You're a young man and young men wake up with erections, don't they? Young men just wake up hard, it's a fact of life."
And after that she starts giving him a handjob and tells him to relax- fantastic. Great premise and great story. Thanks!
Beautiful.
Thank you.
I'm anxious to read chapter 2.
Wonderful!
This is a prose poem with a mysterious beginning -- the war, the lost mother, the authorities, and the ever present rain. Every sentence is carefully crafted, every word just right.
You are an elegant writer and an accomplished story teller.
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