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My Playmate, My Sister Ch. 02

byBraindard©
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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/26/12

4 Stars

Amazing story, made even better by the fact that Sara is one of the hottest women on the planet; And a personal favorite of mine.

However, the grammatical errors, and switching of the point-of-view made it a little awkward to read. I suggest either an editor, or have a friend proof-read it for you before you submit a story.

Other than that, brilliant story. Can't wait to read more of Sara and Andrew's story.

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by KMB247604/27/12

This is a truly excellent story...would love to see this continue

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by Anonymous05/01/12

risky just got sexy

i literallythink i just came as hard as he did inside her.....

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by Anonymous06/29/12

Fantastic, hot second chapter (; love Sara and this did her justice. hope to see a third!

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by Anonymous06/29/12

Great story...

... hope you continue. I do wish for one thing... keep it first person or third person. jumping back and forth is irritating. Her asking for it in the ass would be pretty cool too. So I guess that's two things I'm wishing for, no-one's poifekt.

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by Anonymous07/14/12

More please! I'm a woman and I have to say these first two chapters have my pussy dripping wet ;)

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by kaidman10/12/12

dynamite read

you should consider writing a third chapter about their boat excursions and then a fourth about her and him getting together at her photoshoot

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by Anonymous12/26/12

O_O

Pretty good word painting, though I was confused with the past or present tense sometimes. 3rd person? 2nd person? 1st person? Overall, it was a good read.

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by Anonymous12/27/12

Great!!

Great story....hope you continue with it.

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by Rasmat11/19/14

Really enjoying this story, but it got a bit confusing when you were jumping around from 1st person to 3rd person, etc.

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by sunchaser79602/09/15

Very Hot

I just couldn't get over how they were having sex the back of the van and their mother didn't smell the sexual aroma coming from the back of the van. Its hot and I love it

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