The Honey Trap

I Saw It Coming A Mile Away ( except for the unopened envelope part, DAMN) !

Sometimes being a excellent writer can work against the score of your story & I'm afraid it might here. F.M. is superb at making the reader feel the pain of his narrators' betrayals. The humiliation & shredded self esteem are really brought home.

The downside being that the 'he-man woman hater readers' fight or flight instincts are triggered thru a skillful, vicarious tale of wayward love & loss as this one. The blood lust, once in play , will not be satiated by mere loss of face , social status even money levered by intellectual ploys. No, no, no !

The offenders ideally must be mauled and beaten then tarred feathered - ead infinitum . Well for what it's worth, I enjoyed this so much, although it must be confessed that I wouldn't have minded if someone slips a roofie in Frank's drink as he waits forlornly at the gay bar.

He fights futilely at first. Only to discover he's been in denial in terms of his true sexuality & the actual reason he wants to boink Michael's women is because he's doomed to be in unrequited love with Michael . Just saying ...not that there's anything wrong with that.

fun writing

Grove Press?Abais Nin and Henry Millet?Grove Press was known for publishing daring works like Miller's Tropic of Capricorn back in the 50's abd Miller and Nin were know for their affairs with each other and with other people and writing aboutthem.

Neat revenge story.Melanie is just a bit too much,even a cold hearted bitch wouldn't be that cold and when the shit hits the fan she would be a lot more wrecked then wondering where she could sleep. Turns out he would have had his revenge anyway,melanie would have been tossed aside soon. Too bad rhiannon,penny and the hero couldn't have made a triad:).One nit you have melanie's name wrong in one spot.

Nice

Great story, very much a romance, and quite a delight to read. Thank you.

You have got to love a story...

That has a hooker with a heart of gold:) Great story as always

You're the man, FM

You keep turning out tales that hold us spell bound. Yeah, I know that identifying with your hero will get me classified as a wimp and a wuss, but he at least has a happy future... Though he could have gotten there without passing GO!

Nice!!

Thanks for sharing a great story!!! *****

I'm surprised only that there wasn't a June in the story, alluding to Miller and Nin.

While preferring something grittier than this, I did very much enjoy. But you lose a star for not having half a page of filth between client and Rhiannon. (And I know that would have taken away from the moral of the tale).

Thanks for writing.

Well Done!

Overall you did a excellent job on this story. I especially liked the original twist to the
revenge.
On the downside, a few misused words - like discomfited when it should of been
discomfort and on page 4 about half way down you referred to Melanie as Marlene.
Otherwise I would have given you five stars!!!!

The same but so different

This story started out with the sameness of many stories -- unexpected trip back home, finding wife with another man, and wife saying goodbye. What makes this story special is two things. One, the way the author makes the reader 'get into' the characters (even the bad guys). Two, the unusual, but effective, revenge.

A PAID ESCORT WITH A HEART

good sense and humor. TK U MLJ LV NV

Really, really a quality story.

Good show! Occasionally a good author appears.

Nice.

A nicely-told little fantasy (and we know it's a fantasy because Rhiannon gives him the tips back). But, all cynicism about the mythological nature of the hooker-with-a-heart-of-gold aside, it's the sort of competently-constructed tale we've learned to expect from you. It's always a good day when I see your byline in the "New Stories" listings. Please keep writing.

speechless...

absolutely fabulous... nothing more to say, thanks for listening...

Good story with a good ending and I loved the nice touch of sending Frank to a gay bar. Never will figure out why beautiful women sell themselves, but I guess it is easier than working for a living? There were several discordant notes, such was when he didn't tell Penny what was going on from the first time the bait was trolled at the swimming pool. It would have been a lot more realistic to call her, or drop by and just let her know it was all a sham. I realize the story was constructed the way it was to heighten the suspense factor, but there was no assurance that Penny would be at home when the last minute frantic call was made, nor that Melanie would be either, which would have left the pro to deal with Frank. Just nit pics, so I understand why the story was written this way, but there were other avenues. Also, I hate to interject more realism, but Rhiannon would never have allowed herself to fall for Michael, so the last scene is pure fantasy, other than to give Penny some reinforcement to get him tied up. As for the money being given back get real, the woman makes her living using her body, so even if she didn't fuck Michael, she fucked Frank at least figuratively, so she earned it per the contract.

Still all in all a great read.

This story, for me, was your best thus far.

Sometimes you seem to try too hard to be different. This one was just enough different to be very enjoyable. It was well written and plotted. The characters seemed real. We have all know a few Franks over the years, as well as a few Melanies. Simply put, this was a well done, enjoyable read. Thanks!

Oh, First Rate!

Really terrific.

I am rather astounded that Melanie thought Frank would be faithful though. Could she have been that dumb as well as being heartless?

A really creditable story. Thanks for sharing!

Good story

Amfotog,
I mean no offence - however I am amused that, as you take the author very gently to task for grammatical errors, you yourself are equally guilty.

In the first place, you are quite right - the original meaning of ‘discomfited’ was indeed vastly different to ‘discomforted’ but common usage has rendered them more similar (to make someone feel uneasy, embarrassed, etc.).

Secondly, however, you state ‘when it should of been’ – itself a common but insidious error which needs to be ‘when it should have been’.
‘Of’ is a preposition and has no part in such a sentence. I suspect that lazy pronunciation is at fault for many minor grammatical errors – “should’ve” (truncation from “should have”) sounds like “should of” although the latter has no meaning.

No offence but perhaps now you could give FM 5 stars! (LOL)

To the story (oh yeah – that!!) - I thought this a worthy solution to an age-old LW conundrum – how to screw M- and F-assholes in the cuckold dance. FM often has quirky plots and this is quirkier than most. Five stars for originality, entertainment and a happy ending.

Thanks FM

Your story

brought tears to my eyes. I weep at good movies too. Thanks.

Candy Apple Feel-Good Story

Sometimes it's nice to read one or two of those...thanks.

Well Done

I enjoyed this story very much. The subtle revenge worked so much better than physical confrontation with Frank. As far Melanie, she didn't get half of what she deserves but she will. Now she will be the laughing stock of the club and have to spend her days watching Michael and Penny loving each other.

As far as grammatical errors or misspellings, my gauge of a story is when it gets me so involve that I don't notice any but the most horrendous errors. Until it was pointed out by the English Professor in our midst, I didn't notice. Guess that says how much I liked the story.

Thanks for your hard work and please keep writing. Let the ones who do the nit picking go pay for their literature.

Woodmanone

Amen

to all the good things said so far in the comments section. Francis Macomber, this reader appreciates your soooo pleasant, sooooo interesting, so gentle,and, especially, soooooo very special stories. Thank you.

Add this to the all time favorite TTB list

Great story, clever plot and flow. This will make everyone happy other than the cucks.!

Really fun and sexy revenge tale

I liked the honey-trap scheme, I haven't read one of those in a while. Well done entertainment.

Just, Damn!

A home run. And not just a home run, but a bases loaded, ninth inning, full count for the game winner home run.

The mechanics were perfect. The characters were well fleshed out. The plot was both entertaining and fresh. The story drove the emotion of the reader like any good story does. It captivated and drew the reader in. This is truly one of the absolute best I've read here in a long while.

I gave this the full five stars, and were it possible, I'd have given it ten. Bravo!

Ah

Thank you for leaving his balls intact. Nice story with enough interest to keep the plot from being too predictable. Perhaps it was the failure at the tennis courts that kept it open ended for me.

Top notch!

Really good.

Francis m you are a super star , writer

another one of the best pieces ever written on this site. it had it all. interest,intrigue,revenge.payback,plot,story line.romance,and a beautiful conclusion .
I hope you can keep them coming and continue you writings(stories) for ever

Great story

Well written with a great story line

Great story

Very well written. One of the best I've read here. Congrats

what a macho man

great story... the man is a real man... all you wimpos out there please make notes as to how a real man behaves... He dosent forgive the bitch... period... 5 star rating..

Really enjoyable.

At the risk of repeating, Really enjoyable! well thought out & well written. 10 out of 10

Superb

This was an excellent effort. Very enjoyable to read. It stirred the emotions and resolved the issues well.

Thank you for the great effort. 5 stars.
-Pultoy

Excellent

Well written, entertaining, sexy, fantastic effort.

This...

NOW...THIS...IS...REVENGE!!!

With all of the cuck, wimp, gay, creampie eating stories that seem to permeate this site, this story hits a grand slam! Maybe, just maybe, more authors will take heed of the gist of this story and write accordingly!

Excelsior!

WOW

Now that was a good story and GREAT revenge.....and the good guy got the good girl

Brilliant, well done, a truly refreshing change.

Good Read!!!!!

Thanks for sharing a very entertaining and well written story!

A well thought out tale, detailed and well written and really enjoyable. We readers are lucky to have such authors as you, Thank you.

5 stars for a Modern Figaro Type Revenge story

I start my comment with this (generaly I put this sentences after my first comment at a revenge story): The ancestor of all revenge stories the "Poor Man Of Nippur", which was found 3500 years ago in Akkadian, but the archeologists think it is older story and origins from Sumerian. The story is without marriage plot.
The marriage and fidelity is in a revenge story plot, that is the Beaumarchais/ Da Ponte/ Mozart "Marriage of Figaro" Opera (before Comedia).
I laught more than half hour during the reading time and after reading this story.
Fantasic hyper super revenge story and very very humorous. I could match lucksmith's story "Let the Punishment Fits the Crime", Vulcez "How are You" and StangStar06's some excellent humorous stories. Sometime a man do not know which woman loves him. The best example is for this thing 800Ibgorilla excellent SciFi & Fantasy story "A Beautiful Wish" (for me the best story of SOL and LIT), where 2 women love the main character secretly.....and a third girl shows to the main character.
BTW This story is not only one revenge story where escort girls play roles in the revenge, but this story is the best of them.

Beaten cuckolds all a twitter

Good thing those illiterate half-wits base their votes and comments on a single unimportant aspect of a story. That way those of us with triple digit IQs can ignore their senseless babbling and make lucid and valid observations about the writing. (In case you are wondering who they are, they are the same nutjobs who bashed this author when he submitted an equally compelling and well written story that failed their asinine litmus test).

Well edited. The legion of beaten cuckolds will praise and vote 5 for stories that would fail a middle school English exam. Authors that take the time to proofread their work (and god forbid, run spell check) demonstrate their love of writing and intent to appeal to an intelligent audience. Top notch editing for grammar, length, and continuity.

Simple but effective plot. After crafting the characters and developing them within the scene, the author moved the plot with believable dialogue and unusual but not outrageous plot devices. Losing the tennis match and his wife afforded the opportunity to create his dramatic comeback. Redemption is a powerful emotional device and it was executed expertly here.

Thank god this author hasn't joined the legions of other good authors who abandoned this category (or site) due to the avalanche of comments from mindless beaten cuckolds bashing every story that doesn't pass their fatuous litmus test. Like one of them said; "Maybe, just maybe" some of the authors submitting unedited nonsense will take a page from this author and learn something about writing an actual story.

Sweet -

But really a bit of candy...
I mean I liked it, but I also saw all the buttons being pushed.
Something for the guys and gals, I guess.

Now, if you had named the heavy Frank Cooms...

Green-something

Nice

pretty straightforward, kinda predictable, but still totally enjoyed it.

a GOOD but not quite GREAT story .

FIRST let me say I have to agree with others... that this IS your best story so far. Many of your early stories actually mde my stomach turn they was so bad and so convoluted but you are definitely getting betterwith these last few stories.

The two things which bother me about the story-- and these relatively minor-- Has to do with the husband's initial reaction and not telling Penny.

In these kinds of LW stories where the wife suddenly announces that she is is in love with another man and leaving the marriage ... and this decision t comes out of the blue and is a total shock like this... I would like to see a husband who still able to function and realize that this is a vastly different woman than he thought he was married to... And that he need to take appropriate actions.

Like change the locks.

I know that most of the time LW authors are trying to show the husband's grasp on reality has been shaken to its very core... and that the shock is so bad that he is unable to think clearly for a few days and he ends up NOT taking care of business with respect to bank accounts ...changing the locks ....Life Insurance ...Healthcare coverage etc etc . But this sort of reaction seems to happen in these sorts of stories. Maybe I am asking for too much but just one time I would like to see one of these LW where the husband is not completely fall apart when she drops this bombshell on him.

The other issue of course has to do if not telling penny. There is no possible reason why Penny could not have been told early on what was occurring with the Escort. It's a little force and contrived. Still ...all in all this is a pretty good story.

What color is the sky in your little world Harry?

Husband went to his lawyer, changed his will and then: "I headed straight for Human Resources. I had lots of changes to make in my health insurance, my 401K plan and numerous other benefits that involved a spouse." Give yourself a zero on that one Harry.

"I mentally kicked myself for not having planned in advance how to deal with Penny. I didn't want to risk revealing my plan" seems pretty straightforward but then again the objective reality in which I live bases my conclusions on facts drawn from the author's story. Not made up bullshit or obtuse oversights. 2 zeros for you Harry. 5 stars for the author.

2 thought

1. An old story about Socrates: Socrates was among the spectators in Olimpia. The champion of the sprint competition yeled loudly "I am the winner, the champion, I am happy, I am glad, etc,,..." Socrates went to the winner, and he asked him: " Are the other copetitors weaker, worse as you are? The Champinon told Socrates: "Yes!"
Socrates asked: "Why are you glad? You won on the weakers...........
Yes that is nice when the rabbit won on Lion...........I am sorry......Frank.....
2. I think it is important to show in the revenge story the main character will find a second woman for his mate in the aftermath or epiloge. It does not matter it will be 1-2-3 years later or at once as in this story there was, because this can show that, the much-much majority of the revenge stories are not misgynist stories but they are only ANTI SLUT/BITCH/WHORE wives stories. I am glad majority of FM's stories are second women...........

Gawd i love duna...what a fucking star. Puts 'arry in the shade,

Others have mentioned candy- floss, and may have a point. Someone mentioned smooth as silk, but another grit. I reckon this author has a fantastical tale to relate to us but as yet - four points. Thank-you FM.

Great stuff

I really liked your "The six o'clock news" but I find this one to be far better. I almost wished Michael had hooked up with Rhiannon. This was by far your best story to this date. I went through something that was similar and truly identified with Michael.

Shit. Just reread Harry's comment and he's actually nailed it.

I do fucking hate when that happens.

Well written and interesting story

Very nice twists at the end. Well done!

Five = Perfect???

Screwing up a name once is worth a point? I'm a much more lenient grader! Telling Penny? Please do not forget that Penny is his mixed doubles partner. Since our hero is a guy, the 'mixed' part means Penny has to be a doll! Otherwise, he treats her as a non-sexual entity. Cute and friendly, but non-sexual. It isn't until the Temptress tells him that he and Penny are in love with each other that he even STARTS to consider it. Also...Don't forget, 3 people can keep a secret ... if 2 of them are dead!