She Didn't Know That I Knew

Thank-you

I enjoyed reading your story ....thankyou Sid

Dull as dishwater.

Though not badly written. 3*

Aaah - good ol' Norwegian Sex - the best one in the Scandinavian family

The others Swedish Pussybite, Danish Backhole and Icelandic Tumble are equally good but only with more practice.

Nice, short read

At least no cuckold wimps in this one. Reasonably well-written. A little research would be in order, however -- it makes the writing better when the writing is more factual. I have a close friend who is an OB-GYN physician, and we've talked a lot about his training years. He did a five year residency. There is no such thing as a two year GYN residency training program in the USA.

I realize this story was short, but we know nothing about our Scandinavian goddess's line of work, other than leg-spreading 101. How can she be at home all the time, in the middle of the day, so that she can pull trains and such? And the others, they all had the day off, and they like MMMF scenes? Yuk. Simply saying that sex was recreational for Inga doesn't really explain her activities. She knew the importance of monogamy from the start of their relationship; what were her motivations for cheating, and why was marital sex boring? Still, was entertaining and fairly original. Thanks for writing.

Good story

Did she have AIDS

Good synopsis

I didn't get attached to the characters, and I had a hard time believing that a man shooting a gun in his own basement would get such a harsh sentence. He was the good guy in this tale. Oh, well....

Really More An Outline Than A Story

The premise has potential, perhaps as a rewrite. Also, the wife's pov & motivations are a complete mystery.

Ignore the previous Anonymous poster.......

You're doing just fine.

needs

This story is to cut and dry. Its like the old show dragnet, the facts, just the facts.
It is better than a lot of storys posted but lacks a lot of feelings. ok maybe it is me
but I don`t thinl so. keep trying.

Anon is partially right

you need to fill out your characters, but i liked the stroy and it is you that is writing it - hell not everyone liked dickens either. so keep on keeping on. i gave you a five because they did not have a 4.5 so 4 was too low so you get the 5. keep it up.

You've been bitten by the writing bug. Good news for us if....

you polish it all up a little. Today you're gonna be 1&2 in the charts, but perhaps you could've produced one really good tale instead of two mediocre. Don't worry, I can remember a few writers on here that started off raw as all fuck (Sit down Slirps).

Now i just can't work out why Inga started going cock crazy. Something to do with a micro-dick. Or was that the other story...3*

Sucks

WTF tells a woman on their first date they won't have sex with them because she may have VD. How could you possibly be more insulting to a woman?

Jejeje dude I am sorry about the Norwegian comment on the Mexican Virgin!

You got me back. Five stars for this because you are starting to tell it like I like it. The last two comments are both on the spot. I reckon witless he may of used cantbuymy as his example of another improving writter. Happy days a coming and lets keep our revenge manly. Here I know you take the slut back and thats ok. Kind of.

Not Bad

Interesting story. The only problem was that Inga didn't die in agonizing pain. Oh well. Maybe next time.


HA

Thanks

For the read.

could use some editing

especially if english is not your native tongue. More importantly drop the cliches,Inga saying 'you americans are uptight'(reminds me of col klink.in "hogan's heroes' saying you americans are so amusing) or that scandinavians are loose (and given tge emphasis on sex ed in those countries,lot more likely a corn fed girl from the heartland being ignorant of using condoms then one from norway).

Keep writing you have ideas and a voice,now it is polishing the writing)

Oldhidicky is right

Police are very unlikely to write up such charges, and DAs are even more unlikely to press them. Early in the story, PullToy alludes to European naturalness regarding sex and to changing partners every week or month. Obsession and promiscuity are outside of that description, but nothing is described as an explanation for these changes. Perhaps the reason is that all their 'together' time is in the rack, or carpet, or...!

Re: rudely buggered (you have got to love that expression)

I'll stick my neck on the line. I don't know who the guy is but I like him. Betrayed is everything I hate. The poacher turned gamekeeper is the upper end of what he is. The working class can kiss my ass - I've got the foreman's job at last and yet worse. the unavoidable cuckold turned misogynist. Yes, that is the word that comes to mind. I mean, I realise there are degrees of betrayal and humiliation, but if you've had a gal wrong you, welcome to the human race. It's how you pick yourself up after a mental love battering that will provide you with the self-esteem to catch another wave. When Betrayed talks about hurting women, you know, at the smallest degree of sin, like having a crap husband and getting off with the hunky pool boy at a drunken party...jeez...its a sex site....and he wants every fucking bitch in the world dead...it fucking offends me and many others...it drives away writers and commenters.. it fucks up the site. Now sometimes some of these people throw in a little humor, and sometimes the anonymous guy sets his targets askew, like RH and duna, but this cunt betrayed wishing agonizing pain on my daughter, my mother, my sisters, my women friends ....fuck him.

An interesting chain of events

His whole life went to hell in a hand basket in a very short period of time, and he had pleny of time to think about what he could have done differently while in the lock-up.

I wonder if he would do anything differently if he could have a do-over.

A good storyline and a well written story.

Thanks for the read.

Good work

A bit preachy. I prefer a story where the events teach the lesson without having to verbalize it but I like the clarity of his position. Sex is great but running around without care can lead to problems. It's kind of odd that she stopped having sex before marriage because she was scared of disease but then after marriage felt it was OK. What about marriage would protect her from disease? Did she really stop when they were engaged? She was an educated professional. How could she act like she did when she went for the office visit? She sounded like a dope. He told her that unprotected sex could lead to disease. It did, big time. And yet she seems to be saying he doesn't have a valid point. It's like someone putting their hand on a stove, getting burned, and while standing there looking at their blistered hand declaring that there is no danger from a hot stove. Seriously dumb blond and that makes for a boring character. It's a common LW failing.

nowegian sex

What the heck is nowegian sex other than having sex with a norwegian?

This story is much akin to a lobotomized JPB !

The foundation for a acceptable story is there- a sympathetic narrator, sexy but susceptible to temptation wife of foreign origin and betrayal by business acquaintances along with a forceful revenge. Yet this effort falls short .

The narrator is robotic, too flawless. The author doesn't use vivid metaphors to drive home the highs & lows of the relationship to the reader. The exception, where Pultoy did a fair job, was the sex described during the solid years of the marriage. Other then that the good Doctor came off as a drone until the 40 caliber hijinks.

I humbly recommend that Pultoy choose his words as well as his weapons. Perhaps peruse JPB & Slirpuff's better stories on this theme where the narrator goes a little or a lot crazy. More dialogue is needed between husband & wife as well.

Did those 2 characters have a actual conversation until she showed up at the end of the story with her latest malady of carnal origin ? Thus author definitely has the urge & energy to write. That's a core requirement. Kudos on that account.

Now if he can refine his efforts - I predict he can improve to make mistakes of a much refined level. I wish Pultoy both luck & a compendium of James Cain and or Micky Spillane.

Why even think about getting married to such a woman as this?

The old "digdaddy" has it right again.

I agree that this was a good, well-written story. As far as I'm concerned it was worth Five Stars,

I like your story

I thought is was very creative.

As for LordSlamDawgg:

Comparing another author to another inside the comment page is very rude and distastefull.

OK I get you like Just Plain Bob's stories. Go read them if you like them so much.

Just dont expect all the author's to write like he does. Variety makes us strong.

And so you know I hate JPB's stories. I will not tell you why - I just do.

Sorry Poltoy for ranting here. Like I said I loved the story and hope to see more.

John

Interesting and binding story...

The lady just did not get it.....

Give the writer a break...

We can't always have brilliant, down-to-earth conversations between husband and wife. I may add that he should have never married her, sluts rarely change, I know that I never did. I was with a lady that I thought I loved once, she loved sex with me and with anyone else. I was heartbroken for a year, got with her again realizing what she was like. We did OK, she finally moved out of state and found her a nice husband. I wish the both of them well. It was thirty years before I fell in love again. She and I were monagamous for fourteen years then agreed to just be friends. I still love her, she loves me but as a friend. Since she is 21 years younger than I am I can have empathy for her and let her go (after a mild struggle, of course). She has yet to find her a companion, she told me she was looking. Our relationship has been long-distance for about the last five years, that has been the main problem. PLUS, I remain married all this time (since the fifties). I can't blame Sweetie Pie.

Enjoyable but far-fetched

Most elements were somewhat believable and the story was certainly fun. However, a a well educated man should have known that firing a weapon in a home and in a city without emergency self defense conditions would be illegal. So long as he got proof of participant identity and photo shots, rather than firing pistol shots, he could have accomplished the same revenge without using the weapon or ending up in prison and going through handstands to recover his medical license. Also, one would have thought that the male participants in the basement orgy would have recognised the reputational risk that they were running.

Still a fun story, and realism is not the only measure of an entertaining tale! Dan

pretty clinical and stark

it is hard to get invested in the characters due to the sparse details we are given. Firing warning shots to detain the cheaters and being charged, found guilty and jailed seems very unlikely and quite wrong. The office party in the basement was excessive.

I know it's only a story...but

I know it's only a story but a little more thought would have made it much better. Firing a weapon inside your home won't get you charged with the inside city limits charge. A decent lawyer could possibly get the endangerment charges reduced or dismissed by showing he did not aim at anyone, the exception being the last shot and that would be argued as self defense. Physicians have a lot of clout, patients might either hold positions of power or have a spouse or family member that does.
I offer this information so any future stories will be a bit more researched. This would still be a great story with changes made to accommodate the facts provided and perhaps even a better one as the husband's revenge would have been even better. All the lawsuits would still have occurred and the one for lost income could have been changed to endangering his life and employment as who wants to go to a doctor with VD?

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I thought the filament (?) of you imagination was pretty good. Not knowing various State, City, or County ordinances or medical practice restrictions I cannot comment on them. The story as it stands was fine. BTB! Cheers!

discharging firearm

I knew a man that was prosecuted for shooting at a rat in his barn in a rural area well outside any town, so even the fact that he was in his home is no legal defense.

Uh. Well...

Very clinucal indeed. Would make a good medical report.
As for erotica... Uh. Well... not so much.
Three stars for technique.

Dumb, costly macho stunts

Once he found all their clothes piled up, all he had to do was grab them, slip back out the front door with them and do his going through the pockets and making his phone calls outside. Then he could have just sat back and let the wives and the health dept responders be the ones to surprise his wife and her fuck buddies.

too little detail

Hardly enough detail in this story. How did the men get involved with Inge? What happened to Inge while she was away from Bill? Bill's dismissal of Inge was very blunt. Inge had to know about monogamous relationships and probably shouldn't have been portrayed as a prolific whore (but this is your story, after all).

Damn

Read this again. Basically this tale shows one true aspect of life. Cheating hurts everyone involved. Enough said.

Bread In The Desert After A Week

That's how dry this is.