by Channi7
Colored girl what color would that be???? Basically is she the exception for all"colored" girls and not the rule? I am sure your story will appeal to most I am going to take a pass.
Please continue the story as the start is very good. I try not to second guess you so give us another chapter Please.
the Colored girl and hair thing gave me pause, what is this 1950?...lol and FYI plenty black girls have hair pass shoulder length so let's not continue that stereotype but other than that great start I would love to see where this story goes and Jed is an interesting led it's nice to see a male character go through the motions of a breakup plus I love the family dynamics
I Like your story so far. But what time period is the story set in by the way. Blacks are not called colored any more if it is present time. African American or Black will do. As well, black women get a bad rap on their hair and we are trying to uplift the neg image so good for a colored girl is not correct and I found it offensive. Please keep in mind in future post. Maybe describe the hair color,texture. Over all I loved the story.
Please continue with you story. I love the beginning
good story line, i like the way you are developing your characters. PLEASE continue
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As your first story. Great job. Even some seasoned writers. Can't write as well á you do. Be mindful get a editor. To prevent getting torn apart by the anonymous.
where o where has my lost lamb gone. TK U MLJ LV NV
...pretty good for a COLORED girl...I'M OUT! ...THIS SUCKS...Next author please...
I'd really like to know what's next because it's off to a great start!
Uncompleted after five years. Too bad, no obvious errors and interesting storyline.
Plus, I hate unmarked/unfinished serial stories.
Long time lurker.
Perhaps that's the only reason why this story is incomplete??