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Utter Trash Waste of Time
This is worse than the first chapter. There is no rhyme or reason to the story it just plainly out rightly sucks.
well
Ok it has a LOT of potential but that is about all it has it had been long enough that I figured the second chapter would be longer unfortunately it actually seemed shorter. You have a great basis of a idea but it needs to be longer and more detailed overall I know many would love this idea but as they say God and or The Devil is in the details.
Chapter 2 is starting a novel
Now you need to really get a move on and post more chapters so we see where this is going.
Nice story line
I like how you included the son in servtitude.I look forward to more of the story.
more
Great start. This just begs for more chapters. Like how you got son to suck dad. more Bi sex would be nice too.
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