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His World - School Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/13/12

Just stop for a moment.

This is a poorly written attempt at a story; you're obviously just pouring out a fantasy you have with little regard to plot, character or pacing. Slow down, put some thought into it and try again.

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by Nobuo05/15/12

Surprised

Y'know, usually I'd agree with anonymous. Usually you'd want build-up and conflict and character development. However, this is just so unabashedly ridiculous, that I like it. And usually I hate piss stuff. So over-the-top. I dig it. Keep it up!

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by DamianShep01/27/13

I agree. It did the same for me.

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