All Comments on 'Raven Robinson Ep. 01'

If its a preamble its not bad if its the whole story its not good.

more please cant wait for chapter 2

this is the first part of a 13 episode story arc. and was completed just over a year ago. I will be posting more through the submission process gradually so as not to overload the editors.

...but, even for what it is, it's FAR too short.

If your 13 further instalments are of similar brevity, I suggest you condense them into something more readable - maybe just 3 or 4 chapters.

To give you an idea of how unsatisfactory something like this is, imagine the sexy neighbor knocking on your door, whispering that she's really hot and wants you to fuck her right now... but, sorry, she has to catch a plane to South America and won't be back for six months.