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Story is written in a tired manner
While the story line is a good one, the writing is tired and boring. Grammar is mostly technically correct, but it feels as if this was a literal translation from some other language and not originally in English.
In reality, I just couldn't finish after the first 9 to 10 paragraphs because you jumped around in the plot so much I lost interest. Gave you 2 stars only because your spelling and the idea was good, for what I read, that is.
Fond Memories
This story reminds me of some similar adventures in adult theaters. I often visited a large theater similar to the one in the story. It also had a very busy balcony that was a favorite area for guys sucking and fucking other guys. But there were also male/female couples that played up there.
It was in a large university town and there were always lots of college age guys and girls in the audience. It was usually one big orgy on the weekends with sex throughout the theater and even some guys walking around naked...especially upstairs in the balcony. It was not unusual to see a guy walking around the balcony naked letting various guys suck their cock for awhile before moving on to the next cocksucker...like a humming bird or a bumble bee working a bunch of flowers.
I wrote a story about those adventures and submitted it to Literotica, but it was never published and I've never been given an explanation of why it wasn't published.
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