All Comments on 'A Father's Love'

Despite the many grammatical and spelling errors this is a good attempt at all-out pornographic fiction. I strongly suggest the writer get editorial help for his next story. and I hope he will continue writing as he obviously has the imagination needed to develop into a very able pornographer.

Good story line, I became very frustrated with the repetitive use of "Dad said" in each paragraph, you used it so much that in one sentence you used it twice;

"Dad said dad said he was getting close himself". In the future please have your stories edited so that they flow and your readers can enjoy.

Thanks and Good luck!

I liked this story but its in need of some good editing, i hope you continue writing but next time have some help you on the edit the story.

Love to see them couple a little more. There's not enough father/son incest here as it is. There should be more like on nifty.

hard to read ....get editing next time.

It seems incomplete

There were a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors, so it was nearly impossible to follow the story line. The countless run-on sentences made it so frustrating and unrealistic, that I could not finish the story. The author should pay someone to do a complete rewrite of it.

Reminds me of seeing my father boating nude on the bed, letting me touch his limp cock and sucking it hard,