A Father's Love

Good honest porn

Despite the many grammatical and spelling errors this is a good attempt at all-out pornographic fiction. I strongly suggest the writer get editorial help for his next story. and I hope he will continue writing as he obviously has the imagination needed to develop into a very able pornographer.

Dad Said

Good story line, I became very frustrated with the repetitive use of "Dad said" in each paragraph, you used it so much that in one sentence you used it twice;
"Dad said dad said he was getting close himself". In the future please have your stories edited so that they flow and your readers can enjoy.
Thanks and Good luck!

Good try

I liked this story but its in need of some good editing, i hope you continue writing but next time have some help you on the edit the story.

More

Love to see them couple a little more. There's not enough father/son incest here as it is. There should be more like on nifty.

hard to read ....get editing next time.

It seems incomplete