Almost every time you use the phrae 'me and Jennifer', it should be Jennifer and I. When in doubt about what is correct, drop the name from the sentence and just use I or me. Example; I went to the store. Jennifer and I went to the store. It would not be; me went to the store not Jennifer and me (or me and Jennifer) went to the store. And always put the proper name first. Other that this minor distraction, it is a good story.
No more comments, My last one was edited!!! so what's the point? Readers cannot edit stories and the site has no right to ask for comments and then
re-write or edit them
I tolerated the grammatical mistakes until early in chapter 3, and then I had enough. Find yourself a good editor and use him/her with everything you write. Please. Life is too short to have to endure bad grammar.
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